Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by correcting grammar errors and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of saying "enhance myself confidence," say "boost my self-confidence." Also, try to use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas smoothly. Keep your answer concise and clear within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress after a long day. Moreover, it boosts my self-confidence, especially when I perform in front of others. For example, I feel more relaxed and happy when I sing my favorite songs.

제안: Your answer has good content but needs grammatical corrections and better linking. For instance, say "attended them regularly" instead of "on the regular basis." Also, use linking words like "and" or "so" to connect sentences. Try to avoid repetition and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: When I was young, I took singing classes and attended them regularly. I practice every day to improve my skills, and I often perform in front of my family and at small events. Singing has always been a passion of mine, and these experiences have helped me gain confidence.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by correcting singular/plural agreement and using linking words. For example, say "family members" instead of "family member." Also, use words like "which" to connect ideas smoothly. Keep your answer concise and avoid minor grammar mistakes.

예시: I want to sing for my family members because they have always supported and motivated me to improve my vocal skills. Singing for them would be a way to show my gratitude for their constant encouragement, which inspires me to keep learning and developing my talent.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases. For example, "helps and uplift" should be "helps uplift," and "when they done my other" is unclear. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" properly. Try to be specific and clear in your explanations.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people because it helps uplift their mood and relieve stress. For example, when I sing my favorite song, I feel more relaxed and joyful. Additionally, singing together can create a sense of connection, which makes everyone feel happier.

× Singing also helps me improve my vocal skills and enhance myself confidence, especially when I perform in front of others, for example, I feel more relaxed.

✓ Singing also helps me improve my vocal skills and enhance my self-confidence, especially when I perform in front of others; for example, I feel more relaxed.

The phrase 'myself confidence' is incorrect because 'myself' is a reflexive pronoun and cannot be used as a possessive adjective. The correct form is 'my self-confidence'. Also, a semicolon is better to separate the two independent clauses for clarity.

× When I was young, I took singing classes and attended them on the regular basis.

✓ When I was young, I took singing classes and attended them on a regular basis.

The phrase 'on the regular basis' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'on a regular basis'. This is a fixed phrase used to indicate frequency and requires the indefinite article 'a'.

× I practice every day to improve my skills and I often perform in front of my family and at small events.

✓ I practice every day to improve my skills, and I often perform in front of my family and at small events.

A comma before 'and' is needed to separate two independent clauses for better sentence structure and clarity.

× Singing has always been a passion of mine and these experience helped me gain confidence.

✓ Singing has always been a passion of mine, and these experiences helped me gain confidence.

The word 'experience' should be plural 'experiences' to agree with 'these'. Also, a comma before 'and' is needed to separate two independent clauses.

× I want to sing for my family member because they have always supported me and motivated me to improve my vocal skills.

✓ I want to sing for my family members because they have always supported me and motivated me to improve my vocal skills.

'Family member' is singular, but 'they' refers to plural, so 'family members' should be plural to maintain agreement.

× It also inspired me to keep learning and developing my talent.

✓ It also inspires me to keep learning and developing my talent.

The sentence refers to a current ongoing inspiration, so present tense 'inspires' is appropriate instead of past tense 'inspired'.

× Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people because it helps and uplift their mood and release stress.

✓ Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people because it helps uplift their mood and release stress.

The phrase 'helps and uplift' is incorrect; 'helps' should be followed directly by the base verb 'uplift' without 'and' to maintain correct verb structure.

× Singing can also create a sense of connection when they done my other which makes everyone feel happier.

✓ Singing can also create a sense of connection when they do my other songs, which makes everyone feel happier.

The phrase 'when they done my other' is incorrect. 'Done' should be 'do' to match present tense, and 'my other' is incomplete; it should be 'my other songs' or similar. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the relative clause.