Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more fluent and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why singing helps you, and conclude with how it affects your mood.

예시: Yes, I like singing very much because it helps me relieve stress. Whenever I feel overwhelmed by work or personal issues, I sing to express my feelings. This activity makes me feel happier and more relaxed. Therefore, singing is a great way for me to improve my mood.

제안: Focus on clarity and sentence structure. Avoid repetition and use linking words to organize your answer logically. Also, provide more specific details about how you learned to sing and what practicing involved.

예시: Yes, I learned to sing by imitating my older relatives, especially my aunt. When I was younger, I often watched them sing and tried to copy their style. I practiced regularly at home, which helped me improve my singing skills and gain confidence.

제안: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then explain who you want to sing for and why. Use simple and correct vocabulary to express your ideas.

예시: I want to sing for my daughter because singing special songs for her can show my love. I hope she will appreciate these moments and remember them fondly. Singing for her makes me feel happy and connected.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases. Try to give a clear opinion and support it with logical reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid unrelated or incorrect expressions.

예시: Absolutely, singing can bring happiness to people because it makes them feel alive and joyful. When people hear beautiful voices, their bodies release endorphins, which improve their mood. Therefore, singing is a powerful way to spread happiness.

× Yes, most of the time if I am stressed, I would love to sing to express myself and. Lessen my stress from work, at home and everything. It makes me happy.

✓ Yes, most of the time, if I am stressed, I love to sing to express myself and lessen my stress from work, at home, and everything. It makes me happy.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains an incomplete sentence ('and. Lessen my stress...'). The conjunction 'and' should connect two clauses in the same sentence. Also, 'would love' is conditional and not appropriate here; 'love' fits better to express habitual action. Adding commas improves clarity.

× Yeah, I just imitated the older one like my aunt's. They, I, I usually saw them when I was younger. They are singing, so I learned from them and practice at home and it makes me competent with singing.

✓ Yeah, I just imitated the older ones like my aunts. I usually saw them when I was younger. They were singing, so I learned from them and practiced at home, which made me competent at singing.

The pronoun 'the older one like my aunt's' is unclear and should be plural 'older ones like my aunts' to match context. 'They, I, I' is confusing and redundant; simplified to 'I'. 'They are singing' should be past tense 'They were singing' to match 'when I was younger'. 'Practice' should be past tense 'practiced' to maintain tense consistency. 'Competent with singing' corrected to 'competent at singing' for correct preposition.

× I want to see formula. It's Marine. I want to book your special every time I sing a song for her and that song is allowed for a daughter. I hope she will cherish.

✓ I want to sing for someone special. It's my mother. I want to dedicate a special song to her every time I sing, and that song is meant for a daughter. I hope she will cherish it.

The original sentences are unclear and fragmented. 'I want to see formula. It's Marine.' is unclear and likely incorrect. Rephrased to clarify the intended meaning. 'Book your special' is incorrect; 'dedicate a special song' is appropriate. 'Allowed for a daughter' is incorrect; 'meant for a daughter' fits better. Added 'it' at the end for completeness.

× Absolutely, because if you hear someone is saying it makes you feel alive. And more change someone feel like Muslim every time they hear angelic voices and your body release endorphins and.

✓ Absolutely, because when you hear someone singing, it makes you feel alive. Moreover, it can change how someone feels, like feeling peaceful, every time they hear angelic voices, and your body releases endorphins.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'If you hear someone is saying' is incorrect; 'when you hear someone singing' is better. 'More change someone feel like Muslim' is unclear and likely a misstatement; replaced with 'it can change how someone feels, like feeling peaceful'. 'Your body release' should be 'your body releases' for subject-verb agreement. Removed the trailing 'and' to complete the sentence.