Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và thiếu sự liên kết mạch lạc giữa các ý. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và các từ nối để làm cho câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

예시: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and reduce stress after a long day at school.

제안: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu nối để làm rõ ý hơn, tránh lặp từ và câu quá dài.

예시: No, I haven't learned singing formally because I only sing as a hobby and don't plan to become a professional singer.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp.

예시: I usually sing for myself because it helps me relax and relieve stress after school.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để truyền đạt ý kiến hiệu quả hơn.

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness, but it depends on the song and the singer's skill.

× Yes I do, I love singing it is part of my life because I always say when I feel bad or I want to relax after school or stress.

✓ Yes, I do. I love singing; it is part of my life because I always say that when I feel bad or want to relax after school or when I am stressed, singing helps me.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, which makes it confusing. Breaking it into smaller sentences and adding conjunctions improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× This can help me a lot to reduce my stress.

✓ This can help me a lot in reducing my stress.

The verb 'help' is better followed by 'in' plus gerund form to indicate the action that helps. Using 'to reduce' is less natural in this context.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learned' is the preferred past participle form in American English, while 'learnt' is more common in British English. Depending on the variety of English, 'learned' is generally more accepted.

× I just sing as my hobby and I don't want to learn deeply in singing because I don't have any plan to become a singer in the future.

✓ I just sing as my hobby and I don't want to learn singing deeply because I don't have any plans to become a singer in the future.

The phrase 'learn deeply in singing' is incorrect. The correct form is 'learn singing deeply' or 'learn deeply about singing'. Also, 'plan' should be plural 'plans' when referring to intentions.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ For whom do you want to sing?

In formal English, 'whom' is the correct object pronoun after a preposition like 'for'. However, in spoken English, 'who' is commonly used.

× I always love singing for myself because after school I will feel tired so I will want to say my favorite song so I can reduce my stress also I can.

✓ I always love singing for myself because after school I feel tired, so I want to sing my favorite songs to reduce my stress.

The original sentence is confusing and contains awkward phrasing like 'want to say my favorite song' and redundant 'also I can'. Rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?

✓ Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?

No grammatical error in this sentence.

× I think it depends on what song it is and who is singing because it always pays all their skills of singing.

✓ I think it depends on what song it is and who is singing because it always shows their singing skills.

The phrase 'it always pays all their skills of singing' is incorrect and unclear. 'Shows their singing skills' is a clearer and grammatically correct expression.

× If someone bad at singing sing some songs is very bad.

✓ If someone is bad at singing, singing some songs will be very bad.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'someone' and has awkward structure. Adding 'is' and rephrasing improves grammatical correctness and clarity.