Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but lacks natural phrasing and has grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'Singing is not my favorite activity, but I enjoy singing traditional songs when I want to relax.'

예시: Singing is not my favorite activity, but I enjoy singing traditional songs when I want to relax because it helps me feel calm and happy.

제안: Your answer is quite long and unclear due to repetition and grammar mistakes. Start with a clear statement and use linking words to explain your thoughts. For example, say 'I have never formally learned singing because it was not part of my school curriculum. However, if I had the chance, I would definitely like to learn.'

예시: I have never formally learned singing because it was not part of my school curriculum. However, if I had the chance, I would definitely like to learn because I enjoy music.

제안: Your answer shows good content but has some grammar and vocabulary errors. Use correct expressions and linking words to make your answer clearer. For example, say 'I don't have any idols, but I want to sing for my parents because they are very dear to me. They always appreciate my singing and encourage me to improve.'

예시: I don't have any idols, but I want to sing for my parents because they are very dear to me. They always appreciate my singing and encourage me to improve.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but is not very clear and has grammar mistakes. Use linking words and clearer sentences. For example, say 'In my opinion, many people today enjoy singing and music, especially during parties and special occasions. I believe music plays a crucial role in bringing happiness to our lives.'

예시: In my opinion, many people today enjoy singing and music, especially during parties and special occasions. I believe music plays a crucial role in bringing happiness to our lives.

× When sing, singing is not my cup of tea, but whenever I want to relax, I try to sing different kinds of melody and traditional songs in my own way.

✓ When singing, singing is not my cup of tea, but whenever I want to relax, I try to sing different kinds of melodies and traditional songs in my own way.

The phrase 'When sing' is incorrect because after 'when' a verb should be in the -ing form to indicate an action happening at that time. Also, 'kinds of melody' should be plural 'kinds of melodies' because 'kinds' implies multiple types, so the noun should be plural.

× As I see I have never learned about singing because it was not included my my education or it was never specified subject in my school.

✓ As I see, I have never learned about singing because it was not included in my education or it was never a specified subject in my school.

The phrase 'included my my education' is missing the preposition 'in' and has a repeated word 'my'. Also, 'specified subject' needs an article 'a' before it. These corrections improve sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So I think but if I were, if I got a chance to learn about thing I would I would definitely go.

✓ So I think if I got a chance to learn about it, I would definitely go.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary repetition and incomplete clauses. Simplifying the sentence and removing redundant parts improves clarity and grammatical structure.

× Well, I don't have any ideal but I really want to sing for my parents.

✓ Well, I don't have any idea but I really want to sing for my parents.

The word 'ideal' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'idea' to express a thought or plan. This is a vocabulary error affecting pronoun usage contextually.

× They're really close to my heart and they never complain about my bad voice.

✓ They are really close to my heart and they never complain about my bad voice.

Contraction 'They're' is acceptable in speech but for clarity and formality, expanding to 'They are' is better. However, this is optional and not a strict grammar error.

× They always enjoy my voice and appreciating and encourage me for betterment.

✓ They always enjoy my voice and appreciate and encourage me to improve.

The verb 'appreciating' should be in base form 'appreciate' to match the parallel structure with 'enjoy' and 'encourage'. Also, 'for betterment' is awkward; 'to improve' is clearer and more natural.

× In my opinion and this generations, people are ready into singing and they're ready enjoy and they really enjoy music when during parties or on different occasions and I think music is playing really crucial role in our life.

✓ In my opinion, in this generation, people are ready to sing and they really enjoy music during parties or on different occasions, and I think music plays a really crucial role in our lives.

The phrase 'ready into singing' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'ready to sing'. 'Ready enjoy' should be 'ready to enjoy' or omitted for clarity. 'When during parties' is redundant; 'during parties' suffices. 'Music is playing really crucial role' should be 'music plays a really crucial role'. Also, 'this generations' should be 'this generation' and 'our life' should be plural 'our lives'.