Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "I believe" twice and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: No, I don't like singing because I'm not confident in my voice. Also, I feel shy singing in front of others, so I usually avoid it.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and has incomplete sentences. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, avoid vague phrases like "this scale" and be more specific.

예시: No, I have never learnt to sing because I am not interested in it. Besides, I grew up in a village where there were no vocal teachers available. Even if I had the chance, I probably wouldn't take it.

제안: Your answer is heartfelt but contains many fillers like "uh" which affect fluency. Try to reduce fillers and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: Although I'm not passionate about singing, if I ever get a chance, I would like to sing for my mother because she has made many sacrifices to support me throughout my life.

제안: Your answer is relevant and includes an example, but frequent fillers reduce fluency. Use linking words like "for example" and "therefore" more smoothly, and avoid unnecessary pauses.

예시: Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people. For example, when I live abroad away from my family and partner, singing helps me relax and stay positive.

× I believe I would not be able to do just it with justice with the song.

✓ I believe I would not be able to do it justice with the song.

The phrase 'do just it with justice' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'do it justice', meaning to perform or represent something well. The word 'just' is unnecessary and misplaced here.

× Moreover, I grew up in a village, there is no such opportunity available like vocal teachers who can teach me.

✓ Moreover, I grew up in a village where there are no opportunities like vocal teachers who can teach me.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'there is' with a plural noun 'opportunities'. Also, 'like vocal teachers' is better expressed as 'such as vocal teachers'. The sentence is corrected to properly use 'there are' for plural and improve clarity.

× And even if I get a chance, I believe I wouldn't go for it as I.

✓ And even if I get a chance, I believe I wouldn't go for it.

The phrase 'as I' at the end is incomplete and unclear, making the sentence structurally incorrect. Removing 'as I' corrects the sentence and makes it clear.

× Singing is the thing, uh, that suits my mind, relax my body and uh, help me and stay positive thinking.

✓ Singing is the thing that suits my mind, relaxes my body, and helps me stay positive.

The verbs 'relax' and 'help' need to agree with the singular subject 'Singing', so they should be 'relaxes' and 'helps'. Also, 'stay positive thinking' is awkward; it is corrected to 'helps me stay positive' for clarity and grammatical correctness.