Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite long and a bit repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy. Also, use clearer sentence structures and linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and lifts my mood when I'm stressed. It's my favorite hobby and always makes me feel energized.

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be clearer and more natural. Avoid repeating words and use proper verb forms. Adding a linking phrase can improve flow.

예시: No, I haven't taken formal lessons. I usually learn by listening to songs and singing along, which helps me improve gradually.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using clearer expressions and linking words. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'my only one hobby'.

예시: I like to sing for myself and my parents because they enjoy it a lot. Singing is a special hobby for me that brings joy to both me and my family.

제안: Your answer is positive but a bit awkward and repetitive. Try to use more natural phrases and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your points.

예시: Definitely. Singing brings happiness because it relaxes the mind and reduces stress. It can also help people learn new things and express their emotions.

× I not only like singing but also I love singing because it is my only one hobby that makes me happy and to relax my mind when I'm stressed and when I sing I feel more relaxed and my mind can feel my energy.

✓ I not only like singing but also love it because it is my only hobby that makes me happy and helps me relax my mind when I'm stressed. When I sing, I feel more relaxed and energized.

The original sentence is too long and lacks proper conjunctions and parallel structure, causing confusion. 'Only one hobby' is awkward; 'only hobby' is correct. Also, 'to relax my mind' should be 'helps me relax my mind' to maintain parallelism. Breaking the sentence into two improves clarity and flow.

× No, not really. I just listened to song and sing along with it.

✓ No, not really. I just listened to songs and sang along with them.

The verb 'sing' should be in past tense 'sang' to match 'listened'. Also, 'song' should be plural 'songs' because 'listened to' implies multiple songs. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'songs'.

× I just, I think I just learned from listening those.

✓ I think I just learned by listening to them.

The original sentence is awkward and redundant. 'I just, I think I just' is repetitive. 'Learned from listening those' is incorrect; it should be 'learned by listening to them' because 'listen to' requires the preposition 'to' and 'them' refers to songs.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× I would like to sing it for myself and my parents.

✓ I would like to sing for myself and my parents.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and awkward here because 'sing' is an intransitive verb in this context. Removing 'it' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× My parents really cherish me like a child when I'm singing and I would love to do it for myself because it's my only one hobby.

✓ My parents really cherish me like a child when I'm singing, and I would love to do it for myself because it's my only hobby.

'Only one hobby' is awkward; 'only hobby' is correct. The sentence is long and needs a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. The rest is correct.

× Definitely, it's a yes.

✓ Definitely, yes.

'It's a yes' is informal and awkward. Simply saying 'Definitely, yes' is clearer and more natural.

× Singing can bring happiness to people, it can relax our mind, it can expand knowledge, and it can relax our stress.

✓ Singing can bring happiness to people; it can relax our minds, expand our knowledge, and reduce our stress.

The original sentence is a comma splice; it improperly joins independent clauses with commas. Using a semicolon or breaking into separate sentences is correct. Also, 'mind' should be plural 'minds' to match 'our', and 'relax our stress' is incorrect; 'reduce our stress' is appropriate.