Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Try to use clearer expressions and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and natural by limiting it to about 3-4 sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and lift my mood. Whenever I feel down, singing allows me to regain my energy and feel happier.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to organize your ideas better by starting with a clear topic sentence and then supporting it with reasons. Avoid repeating words and phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect your ideas logically.

예시: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons because I only sing for fun. I don't want to feel pressured or stressed, so I just sing to relieve my stress.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more natural expressions and better sentence structure. Try to avoid redundancy and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: I prefer to sing only for myself because I don't want to be judged. Singing in front of others makes me nervous and uncomfortable.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and clearer sentence structure. Try to avoid awkward expressions and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express themselves. The lyrics can inspire and energize listeners, encouraging them to start new journeys.

× Absolutely yes. I'm really into singing because for me it is the best strategy to really mistress.

✓ Absolutely yes. I'm really into singing because for me it is the best strategy to really relax.

The word 'mistress' is incorrect in this context; it seems to be a misuse or typo. The intended meaning is likely 'relax' or 'de-stress'. Using the correct verb form improves clarity and meaning.

× Every time I feel depression I'll be singing and just also can let me regain energy.

✓ Every time I feel depressed, I sing and it also helps me regain energy.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect verb forms. 'Feel depression' should be 'feel depressed' (adjective). 'I'll be singing' is incorrect here; simple present 'I sing' fits better. 'Just also can let me' is ungrammatical; 'it also helps me' is correct.

× No because I just think for fun and I never take it very seriously so I just want to work every time I I sing it just want to relieve my stress.

✓ No, because I just think of it as fun and I never take it very seriously, so every time I sing, I just want to relieve my stress.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'Think for fun' should be 'think of it as fun'. 'I just want to work' is unclear and likely incorrect; it was removed for clarity. Also, 'I I sing it just want' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'every time I sing, I just want'.

× I don't want to put a lot of energy into it and give me like self pressure.

✓ I don't want to put a lot of energy into it or give myself self-pressure.

The pronoun 'me' is incorrectly used; it should be the reflexive pronoun 'myself' because the subject and object are the same person. Also, 'like' is unnecessary here and was removed for clarity.

× Only myself because I don't want any judgement for my singing skills and also it will take me very nervous if someone just sit around me and I'm saying it will make me really scared.

✓ Only myself because I don't want any judgment of my singing skills, and also it makes me very nervous if someone just sits around me while I'm singing; it really scares me.

'Myself' is correctly used here as an object of the preposition 'only', so no change needed there. However, 'judgement for' should be 'judgment of'. 'Take me very nervous' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'makes me very nervous'. 'Someone just sit' should be 'someone just sits' to agree with third person singular. 'I'm saying' should be 'I'm singing'.

× Of course, because singing is a kind of way to express people themselves and especially the lyrics can make people regain some energy and also regain some new insight and make them have encourage to start a new journey.

✓ Of course, because singing is a way to express oneself, and especially the lyrics can help people regain energy, gain new insights, and encourage them to start a new journey.

'A kind of way' is redundant; 'a way' is sufficient. 'Express people themselves' is incorrect; the reflexive pronoun 'oneself' is needed. 'Make them have encourage' is ungrammatical; it should be 'encourage them'. Also, 'regain some new insight' is awkward; 'gain new insights' is better.