Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "when I sing a song that time"; instead, say "when I sing." Also, try to add a linking word to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel relaxed and comfortable whenever I do it.

제안: Your answer is understandable but a bit repetitive and slightly unnatural. Avoid repeating previous points unnecessarily. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about your experience.

예시: To be honest, I have never taken formal singing lessons because I usually sing just for relaxation.

제안: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to respond directly with a topic sentence and support it with clear reasons. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid repeating previous phrases.

예시: I usually sing for my own happiness because it helps me feel relaxed and comfortable.

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit wordy and repetitive. Use linking words to connect your ideas and try to be more specific with examples or reasons. Avoid repeating similar phrases like "feel very relaxed and comfortable" multiple times.

예시: Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax and express their emotions, which improves their mood.

× Definitely, I like singing because when I sing a song that time I feel very relaxed and comfortable.

✓ Definitely, I like singing because when I sing a song, I feel very relaxed and comfortable.

The phrase 'that time' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The sentence should use a comma to separate the clauses. The verb 'singing' is correctly used as a gerund to express liking an activity.

× To be honest, I never tried to learn about singing.

✓ To be honest, I have never tried to learn singing.

The present perfect tense 'have never tried' is appropriate here to indicate an experience up to now. Also, 'learn about singing' is awkward; 'learn singing' or 'learn to sing' is better.

× I already mentioned I like singing for my relaxing mood.

✓ I already mentioned I like singing to relax.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used. The phrase 'for my relaxing mood' is unnatural. Instead, 'to relax' clearly expresses the purpose of singing.

× I think for only my happiness because I only mentioned when I sing a song that I might feel very relaxed and comfortable.

✓ I think only for my happiness because I mentioned that when I sing a song, I feel very relaxed and comfortable.

The pronoun usage is awkward and redundant. 'Only for my happiness' is clearer. Also, 'I only mentioned' should be 'I mentioned that' to introduce the clause properly.

× Definitely, singing is the best way to bring happiness to all people because some people like to sing a song and that time they feel very relaxed and comfortable as well as they feel good.

✓ Definitely, singing is the best way to bring happiness to all people because some people like to sing a song, and at that time, they feel very relaxed, comfortable, and good.

The conjunction 'and that time' is incorrect. It should be 'and at that time' to indicate when they feel relaxed. Also, the sentence benefits from commas to separate ideas clearly.