Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“one of the great way”应为“one of the great ways”，“make our friendship more sustainable”表达不准确且不自然。建议简化句子结构，使用更地道的表达，并注意主谓一致。

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. Also, singing karaoke with my friends strengthens our friendship.

제안: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，如“have ever studied”应为“have studied”，“a a female bass part of the leader”表达混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达身份和经历，避免冗余。

예시: Yes, I have studied singing before. When I was young, I was the female bass and leader of my school choir, and I learned how to perform on stage.

제안: 回答重复且语法混乱，如“when we singing when I'm and my friends see in the karaoke”不通顺。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，使用连接词使句子连贯。

예시: I prefer to sing for my friends because singing karaoke together helps us relax and enjoy our time. It makes me and my friends very happy.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，如“bring the joyful”，“makes us and me and both my friends”。建议使用简洁准确的表达，避免重复，逻辑更清晰。

예시: I believe singing brings joy to people because it allows us to enjoy music together. It makes me and my friends feel happy and relaxed.

× Yes, I am fond of singing because singing is one of the great way to relax my stress and also sing with friends in karaoke is always make our friendship more sustainable.

✓ Yes, I am fond of singing because singing is one of the great ways to relax my stress and also singing with friends in karaoke always makes our friendship more sustainable.

“way”应为复数“ways”，因为前面有“one of the”，表示在多种方式中的一种；“sing with friends”应改为动名词“singing with friends”，作为主语；“is always make”应改为“always makes”，主谓一致，动词第三人称单数形式。

× Yes, I have ever studied how to perform as a singer.

✓ Yes, I have studied how to perform as a singer.

“have ever studied”中“ever”用法不当，正确表达为“have studied”，表示曾经学过。

× I used to be a a female bass part of the leader of the choir and I learned how to perform like a singer in a on a stage before when I was young.

✓ I used to be the female bass part and the leader of the choir, and I learned how to perform like a singer on a stage when I was young.

“a a”重复，应去掉一个；“part of the leader”表达不准确，应为“the female bass part and the leader”；“in a on a stage”多余介词，应为“on a stage”；“before”位置不当，去掉即可。

× I think I would more prefer to sing for my friends because when we singing when I'm and my friends see in the karaoke, we will feel very relaxed and sing with my friends.

✓ I think I would prefer to sing for my friends because when my friends and I sing in the karaoke, we feel very relaxed and happy.

“would more prefer”表达不正确，应为“would prefer”；“when we singing when I'm and my friends see”语序混乱，应改为“when my friends and I sing”；“will feel”时态不符，改为一般现在时“feel”；句子冗长且重复，应简化。

× Both of my friends and also my friends we always feel relaxed too.

✓ Both my friends and I always feel relaxed too.

“Both of my friends and also my friends we”重复且结构混乱，应简化为“Both my friends and I”；“feel”与主语一致。

× I think singing is a great way to bring the joyful to people.

✓ I think singing is a great way to bring joy to people.

“the joyful”用法错误，应为不可数名词“joy”，表示“快乐”。

× I think that singing makes us and me and both my friends feel very happy.

✓ I think that singing makes me and my friends feel very happy.

“us and me and both my friends”重复且混乱，应简化为“me and my friends”；主语和宾语一致。

× Most of us will love the music so we can if we singing we can enjoy the music together.

✓ Most of us love music, so if we sing, we can enjoy the music together.

“if we singing”应为“if we sing”，条件句中用动词原形；“will love”改为一般现在时“love”，表示习惯。