Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你嘅答案有啲唔自然同埋有啲重複，句子結構唔夠清晰。建議你用更直接嘅主題句回應問題，然後用連接詞加啲具體嘅細節，令答案更流暢同有邏輯。

예시: Yes, I like singing because it allows me to express my emotions and relax. When I was young, I was inspired by singers on TV who seemed fascinating and wonderful. Since then, I have enjoyed singing by myself as a way to feel happy and confident.

제안: 你嘅答案有啲冗長同埋語法錯誤，建議你用更簡潔嘅句子，並用連接詞令內容更連貫，同時提供更具體嘅原因。

예시: I have tried to learn singing by watching videos on YouTube, but I gave up because it was quite difficult to improve without professional guidance. Therefore, I believe formal lessons are necessary to develop good singing skills.

제안: 你嘅答案有啲混亂同埋語法錯誤，建議你用清晰嘅句子結構，直接回答問題，並用連接詞加啲具體嘅細節，令答案更自然同易明。

예시: I want to sing for my parents and family because they have always supported me. Although I used to be shy about my singing, I hope to show them my improved voice in the future to express my gratitude.

제안: 你嘅答案有啲重複同埋語法錯誤，建議你用更簡潔嘅句子，並用連接詞令內容更連貫，同時提供更具體嘅例子或原因。

예시: Of course, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and express their emotions. For example, when I feel sad, singing a favorite song often lifts my mood and boosts my confidence.

× So I just a sing by myself and I just like singing when I at that time, I think it's very cool.

✓ So I just sang by myself and I just liked singing at that time, I think it was very cool.

句子中 'a sing' 是不正確的動詞形式，應使用過去式 'sang' 來表示過去的動作；'like singing when I at that time' 結構不完整，應改為 'liked singing at that time' 以符合過去時態和正確的介詞用法。

× Actually I just learned by myself to watch the videos on the YouTube and some video platforms, but I just give up because I think I found it was very difficult to learn by myself and you need to have some professional exercise.

✓ Actually I just learned by myself by watching videos on YouTube and some video platforms, but I just gave up because I thought it was very difficult to learn by myself and you need to have some professional exercises.

'learned by myself to watch' 應改為 'learned by myself by watching' 以符合動名詞用法；'give up' 應使用過去式 'gave up'；'think' 應改為過去式 'thought'；'exercise' 應使用複數 'exercises' 因為指多個練習。

× I want to sing for my parents and my family when I was young.

✓ I wanted to sing for my parents and my family when I was young.

句子描述過去的願望，動詞 'want' 應使用過去式 'wanted' 以符合時態一致性。

× I like singing but I just stay singing but just sing by myself.

✓ I liked singing but I just stayed singing and sang by myself.

'like' 應使用過去式 'liked'；'stay singing' 應改為過去式 'stayed singing'；'just sing' 應改為過去式 'sang' 以符合過去時態。

× I'm too shy to show my sick voice for them.

✓ I'm too shy to show my bad voice to them.

'sick voice' 用詞不當，應改為 'bad voice'；介詞 'for' 應改為 'to' 以符合動詞 'show' 的用法。

× So when I was one of mine was stronger.

✓ So when I was stronger.

句子結構不完整且多餘，刪除 'one of mine' 使句子通順且符合語法。

× I want to show my voice to them.

✓ I wanted to show my voice to them.

描述過去的願望，動詞 'want' 應使用過去式 'wanted' 以符合時態一致性。

× when I was sad, I would sing a song to inspire me to be happy and relaxing because seeing the voice can bring happiness and relaxation for people and they can find their voice to show their confidence to show themselves so.

✓ When I was sad, I would sing a song to inspire myself to be happy and relaxed because singing can bring happiness and relaxation to people and they can find their voice to show their confidence and express themselves.

'inspire me to be happy and relaxing' 應改為 'inspire myself to be happy and relaxed'；'seeing the voice' 用詞錯誤，應改為 'singing'；'show themselves so' 結構不完整，改為 'express themselves' 使句子完整且通順。