Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и не совсем естественен. Следует использовать правильные выражения и избегать незавершённых предложений. Также стоит добавить связующие слова для плавности речи.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it lifts my mood and puts a smile on my face. I especially enjoy singing my favorite songs since they fascinate me and make me feel happy.

제안: Ответ слишком длинный и содержит повторения. Следует структурировать ответ, использовать связующие слова и избегать тавтологии.

예시: I haven't formally learned how to sing, but I believe learning singing is a great idea because it helps express emotions and can lead to a rewarding career.

제안: Ответ содержит незавершённые предложения и нечеткие мысли. Рекомендуется использовать связующие слова и завершать мысли, чтобы ответ был более связным и понятным.

예시: To be honest, I would like to sing for my friends and close family because they are very supportive and appreciate the emotions I express through my singing. Sharing music with them strengthens our bond.

제안: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и разнообразить лексику. Используйте более точные слова и плавные переходы между идеями.

예시: I truly believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions effectively. For example, many famous singers put great effort into conveying their feelings, which helps listeners connect with their music.

× Honestly, I like singing because it puts me in a good note and put a smile on my face, and I think I especially like singing my favorite songs.

✓ Honestly, I like singing because it puts me in a good mood and puts a smile on my face, and I especially like singing my favorite songs.

The phrase 'in a good note' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in a good mood'. Also, 'put a smile' should be 'puts a smile' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The verb 'put' needs to be in third person singular form 'puts' here.

× Honestly, I like singing because it puts me in a good note and put a smile on my face, and I think I especially like singing my favorite songs.

✓ Honestly, I like singing because it puts me in a good mood and puts a smile on my face, and I especially like singing my favorite songs.

The verb 'put' should be 'puts' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This is a third person singular verb agreement issue.

× I think this is fascinating and.

✓ I think this is fascinating.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' without completing the thought, which is a sentence structure error. The conjunction 'and' should be removed or followed by a complete clause.

× As I remember, I haven't learned how to sing, but I think this is a really good idea to learn new about singing because it really helps to express your emotions and I think this is a really good career path through the singing so.

✓ As I remember, I haven't learned how to sing, but I think it is a really good idea to learn more about singing because it really helps to express your emotions, and I think it is a really good career path through singing.

The phrase 'learn new about singing' is incorrect; it should be 'learn more about singing'. Also, 'this is' is better replaced with 'it is' for clarity. The sentence is long and needs proper conjunctions and punctuation for clarity.

× As I remember, I haven't learned how to sing, but I think this is a really good idea to learn new about singing because it really helps to express your emotions and I think this is a really good career path through the singing so.

✓ As I remember, I haven't learned how to sing, but I think it is a really good idea to learn more about singing because it really helps to express your emotions, and I think it is a really good career path through singing.

The preposition 'through the singing' is awkward; 'through singing' is more natural. Also, 'learn new about singing' is incorrect; 'learn more about singing' is correct.

× To be honest, I would sing to my friends and close people because they are really supportive about things that I do and.

✓ To be honest, I would sing to my friends and close people because they are really supportive of the things that I do.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' without completing the thought, which is a sentence structure error. Also, the correct preposition is 'supportive of' not 'supportive about'.

× To be honest, I would sing to my friends and close people because they are really supportive about things that I do and.

✓ To be honest, I would sing to my friends and close people because they are really supportive of the things that I do.

The phrase 'supportive about' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'supportive of'.

× They really appreciate my efforts and feelings that I put to my singing, so additionally, sharing music really improves.

✓ They really appreciate my efforts and feelings that I put into my singing, so additionally, sharing music really improves relationships.

The phrase 'put to my singing' is incorrect; it should be 'put into my singing'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'sharing music really improves' without specifying what it improves, which is a sentence structure error.

× They really appreciate my efforts and feelings that I put to my singing, so additionally, sharing music really improves.

✓ They really appreciate my efforts and feelings that I put into my singing, so additionally, sharing music really improves relationships.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'into' when referring to putting effort or feelings into an activity.

× I truly believe that this is true because this is a really helpful and good way to express your emotions and feelings through the songs.

✓ I truly believe that this is true because it is a really helpful and good way to express your emotions and feelings through songs.

The phrase 'through the songs' is better expressed as 'through songs' without the definite article 'the'.

× For instance, many famous and popular singers put many efforts to express themselves so people can understand them through the songs.

✓ For instance, many famous and popular singers put a lot of effort into expressing themselves so people can understand them through songs.

The phrase 'put many efforts to express' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'put a lot of effort into expressing'. Also, 'through the songs' should be 'through songs'.