Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ваш ответ немного запутан и содержит лишние детали, которые не связаны напрямую с вопросом. Постарайтесь давать более чёткий и связный ответ, используя простые и понятные предложения. Например, начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте одно-два предложения с объяснением или примером, используя связующие слова.

예시: I don't really like singing because I don't feel confident about my voice. However, when I'm alone at home, I sometimes sing to relax and feel more energetic.

제안: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Рекомендуется использовать правильные времена и более точные формулировки. Также стоит добавить связующее слово для плавности речи.

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing properly because I don't think my voice is good enough. I just sing casually like most people do.

제안: Ответ понятен, но содержит повторения и неестественные выражения. Следует избегать повторов и использовать более естественные фразы. Также можно добавить связующее слово для улучшения связности.

예시: I don't want to sing for anyone because I don't think my voice is good enough. As I said before, I'm not confident about singing in front of others.

제안: Ответ содержит неуместные выражения и нечеткие идеи. Рекомендуется использовать более ясные и позитивные формулировки, а также избегать двусмысленностей. Добавьте связующие слова для логичности.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy. A beautiful voice can cheer people up and improve their mood. However, I don't think my singing would have the same effect.

× So. Well, yeah, when I'm home alone I can think, sing because it actually gives me energy.

✓ So, well, yeah, when I'm home alone I can think and sing because it actually gives me energy.

The original sentence incorrectly uses a comma to separate two verbs 'think' and 'sing'. In English, when listing verbs or actions, conjunctions like 'and' should be used to connect them properly. Using a comma alone here causes a sentence structure error.

× And by my sitting I can dance.

✓ And by sitting, I can dance.

The phrase 'by my sitting' is incorrect because 'my' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. The correct form is 'by sitting', using the gerund form without a possessive pronoun. This is a common error with prepositions followed by gerunds.

× I have never learned how to sing because I don't have the voice I would wanna hear myself singing.

✓ I have never learned how to sing because I don't have the voice I would want to hear myself singing.

The use of 'wanna' is informal and inappropriate in this context. It should be replaced with 'want to' for proper grammar and formality. Also, 'I would want to hear myself singing' is the correct structure.

× So technically I just know how to sing how all the people are able to.

✓ So technically, I just know how to sing like everyone else.

The phrase 'how all the people are able to' is awkward and incorrect. It should be replaced with 'like everyone else' to express the intended meaning clearly and grammatically.

× I don't want a thing for anybody because, as I've already mentioned and said, my voice is not nice and excellent enough to sing for somebody.

✓ I don't want to sing for anybody because, as I've already mentioned, my voice is not good or excellent enough to sing for someone.

The phrase 'I don't want a thing for anybody' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'I don't want to sing for anybody'. Also, 'nice and excellent' is an awkward adjective combination; 'good or excellent' is more appropriate. 'Somebody' is replaced with 'someone' for smoother expression.

× If you have a voice of an Angel or a real Sinner, then yeah, you can make people smooth if you try to sing to them and cheer them up with your voice.

✓ If you have the voice of an angel or a real singer, then yeah, you can soothe people if you try to sing to them and cheer them up with your voice.

The phrase 'voice of an Angel or a real Sinner' contains errors: 'Angel' should not be capitalized, and 'Sinner' is incorrect; likely 'singer' was intended. Also, 'make people smooth' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'soothe'. These corrections fix adjective use and word choice errors.

× But as long as you have my voice, people, people's mood will only get worse.

✓ But if you have my voice, people's mood will only get worse.

The phrase 'as long as you have my voice' is incorrect in this context; 'if you have my voice' is more appropriate. Also, 'people, people's mood' is redundant; 'people's mood' suffices. This corrects pronoun and redundancy errors.