Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, and then provide specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions. For example, I often sing new songs in my native language to improve my vocal skills. In the future, I hope to write and perform my own songs.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains repetitive phrases. Try to answer directly and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, use correct grammar and vocabulary to express your thoughts clearly.

예시: No, I have never had a formal singing teacher. However, I practice singing along with songs to improve my rhythm and vocal skills. I hope to take lessons in the future to learn proper techniques.

제안: Your answer is confusing and does not directly address the question. Focus on answering who you want to sing for, and provide specific reasons or examples. Use clear sentences and avoid unnecessary details that do not relate to the question.

예시: I would like to sing for people who enjoy emotional songs. For instance, I write sad songs that express deep feelings, and I hope to share them with listeners who appreciate that style.

제안: Your answer shows good ideas but is difficult to understand due to grammar and sentence structure issues. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Use correct grammar and vocabulary to express your thoughts clearly.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, when I feel depressed, I listen to romantic songs that lift my mood. Also, motivational songs encourage me to stay positive and take action in my life.

× Writing songs and poems in my own language my passion.

✓ Writing songs and poems in my own language is my passion.

The original sentence lacks a verb, making it incomplete. Adding the verb 'is' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× So I sometimes like when any new song religious from my language, I try to sing it with the song and try to improve my vocal as well in the singing field.

✓ So sometimes when any new religious song comes from my language, I try to sing it along with the song and try to improve my vocals as well in the singing field.

The phrase 'like when any new song religious from my language' is incorrect. 'Religious' should be an adjective before 'song', and 'comes' is needed to indicate the arrival of the song. Also, 'sing it with the song' is awkward; 'sing it along with the song' is clearer. 'Vocal' should be plural 'vocals' when referring to singing ability.

× And in the future I will think I will list my own songs which I read.

✓ And in the future, I think I will release my own songs which I write.

The phrase 'I will think' is incorrect for expressing future intention; 'I think I will' is correct. 'List' is likely a mistake for 'release'. Also, 'which I read' should be 'which I write' since songs are created, not read.

× No not really like I didn't have any my master who teaches me how to sing.

✓ No, not really, I don't have a master who teaches me how to sing.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. Since the student is talking about a current state, 'don't have' is appropriate. Also, 'any my master' is incorrect; 'a master' is correct.

× But sometimes like songs came I try to sing in the rhythm so that I can increase my vocal as well and I get a like a proper format.

✓ But sometimes when songs come, I try to sing in rhythm so that I can improve my vocals and get a proper format.

'Songs came' should be 'songs come' to indicate habitual action. 'In the rhythm' should be 'in rhythm'. 'Increase my vocal' should be 'improve my vocals'. 'I get a like a proper format' is unclear; 'get a proper format' is better.

× But till now I don't have any master who teaches me to sing up properly in a good way.

✓ But until now, I don't have any master who teaches me to sing properly in a good way.

'Till now' is better expressed as 'until now'. 'Sing up properly' is incorrect; 'sing properly' suffices.

× Like in writing songs I write a song on different point of views mostly like a like a gangster songs and which I use the weapons and other things.

✓ When writing songs, I write from different points of view, mostly gangster songs in which I use weapons and other things.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Like in writing songs' is awkward; 'When writing songs' is better. 'A song on different point of views' should be 'from different points of view'. 'Like a like a gangster songs' is repetitive and incorrect; 'mostly gangster songs' is correct.

× So I like writing the songs in a good way like as well the romantic songs but I didn't write it.

✓ So I like writing songs well, including romantic songs, but I haven't written any yet.

'The songs' is too specific; 'songs' is better. 'Like as well the romantic songs' is awkward; 'including romantic songs' is clearer. 'I didn't write it' should be 'I haven't written any yet' to indicate no past experience.

× I just write a sad song in my writings and just that.

✓ I just write sad songs in my writings, and that's it.

'A sad song' should be plural 'sad songs' to match 'my writings'. 'And just that' is informal; 'and that's it' is clearer.

× According to me saying you can bring happiness in people.

✓ According to me, singing can bring happiness to people.

'According to me saying' is incorrect; 'According to me' suffices. 'You can bring happiness in people' should be 'singing can bring happiness to people' to match the question context.

× Like sometimes I feel depressed so I listen to the songs like I listen really romantic songs.

✓ Sometimes I feel depressed, so I listen to songs, especially romantic ones.

'Like sometimes' is redundant; 'Sometimes' is enough. 'I listen to the songs like I listen really romantic songs' is awkward; 'I listen to songs, especially romantic ones' is clearer.

× Then I feel good and sometimes I feel low like I can do I'm never to do nothing in the my life.

✓ Then I feel good, but sometimes I feel low, like I can never do anything in my life.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'I can do I'm never to do nothing' is incorrect double negative and unclear. Corrected to 'I can never do anything'.

× Then I listen to other songs which are motivational and I get a courage in me in myself to do a thing or to do a work so that I can.

✓ Then I listen to other songs which are motivational, and I gain courage within myself to do things or work so that I can succeed.

'I get a courage in me in myself' is redundant; 'gain courage within myself' is better. 'To do a thing or to do a work' is vague; 'to do things or work' is clearer. The sentence was incomplete; added 'so that I can succeed' for clarity.