Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，建议注意动词时态和句子结构，避免重复和不连贯。可以尝试用简单句表达自己的感受，并且保持句子完整。

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my feelings. Singing allows me to connect with my emotions and improve my voice.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，避免重复和不完整的句子。可以简洁明了地说明学习经历和原因。

예시: Yes, I have learned singing before, but only online. I found it difficult to stay disciplined, so I eventually gave up.

제안: 回答不够清晰，句子结构混乱，建议先明确回答问题，再用具体细节支持。注意时态一致和句子连贯。

예시: When I was a child, I dreamed of becoming a superstar and singing for many people. I wanted everyone to enjoy my smooth voice.

제안: 回答中语法和词汇使用错误较多，表达不清晰。建议用简单明了的句子表达观点，避免使用错误的词汇和结构。

예시: Yes, I think singing and music can help people relax and feel happy. Singing brings positive energy and joy to everyone.

× Certainly I really like when I singing, I can feel relaxed and I came for myself and my voice.

✓ Certainly I really like singing, I can feel relaxed and I care for myself and my voice.

句中 'when I singing' 中动词形式错误，应使用动名词 'singing' 作为宾语。'came for' 应为 'care for'，表示关心。建议去掉 'when I'，直接用 'like singing'。

× Certainly I really like when I singing, I can feel relaxed and I came for myself and my voice.

✓ Certainly I really like singing, I can feel relaxed and I care for myself and my voice.

句中 'came' 用于表达关心，时态错误，应使用现在时 'care'。

× In the past I learned, but I did not learn very deep because it's online.

✓ In the past I learned, but I did not learn very deeply because it was online.

'learned very deep' 中 'deep' 应为副词形式 'deeply'，修饰动词 'learn'。另外，'it's online' 应用过去时 'it was online'，与前文时态一致。

× I do not have enough discipline, so I give up it so it.

✓ I do not have enough discipline, so I gave it up.

'give up it so it' 结构错误，正确表达为 'gave it up'，动词短语 'give up' 后宾语应放在中间。时态应与上下文一致，使用过去时 'gave'。

× I wonder for myself when I was a child, I really, really want to be a superstar in the performance.

✓ I wondered about myself when I was a child; I really, really wanted to be a superstar in performances.

'wonder for myself' 用法错误，应为 'wondered about myself'。'in the performance' 应改为复数 'in performances'，表示多次表演。时态应为过去时。

× Everyone and me enjoy my voice.

✓ Everyone and I enjoy my voice.

'Everyone and me' 主格应使用 'I'，因为是主语。

× Everyone and me enjoy my voice.

✓ Everyone and I enjoy my voice.

主语为 'Everyone and I'，谓语动词 'enjoy' 正确使用现在时。

× Yes, music OS also help others relax and scene always bring some power help to help people experience happy because happy included in singing.

✓ Yes, music also helps others relax and singing always brings some power to help people feel happy because happiness is included in singing.

'music OS' 可能为误写，应为 'music'。动词 'help' 应加第三人称单数 'helps'。'scene' 应为 'singing'。'bring some power help to help' 结构重复，应简化为 'brings some power to help'。'experience happy' 应为 'feel happy'。'happy included in singing' 应为 'happiness is included in singing'。