Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，有语法错误（如“knock on the right pitch”应为“off the right pitch”），且句子较长且重复。建议简化句子结构，使用更准确的表达，并避免重复。

예시: No, I don't like singing because I am not good at it and often sing off pitch. However, I enjoy humming songs instead.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误（如“never learn”应为“have never learned”，“when I in elementary school”应为“when I was in elementary school”），句子结构混乱。建议使用正确时态和简洁句子表达。

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing. Although I took some music classes in elementary school, the teacher never taught us singing skills.

제안: 回答表达了观点，但句子重复且不够连贯。建议避免重复，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: Since I'm not a good singer, I usually sing or hum to myself to express my emotions.

제안: 回答中有语法错误（如“seeing”应为“singing”），句子较长且结构混乱。建议使用正确单词，分句表达观点，并使用连接词。

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it can affect others positively. Singing happy songs or even humming can spread joy to those around you.

× No, I never learn how to sing before, although there are some music classes when I in elementary school but I really don't know how to sing at that time and never learn it from the teacher.

✓ No, I never learned how to sing before, although there were some music classes when I was in elementary school, but I really didn't know how to sing at that time and never learned it from the teacher.

这里的动作发生在过去，应该使用过去式。'learn' 应该改为 'learned'，'are' 应该改为 'were'，'in' 前面缺少主语，应该是 'I was in elementary school'，'don't know' 应该改为过去式 'didn't know'。过去时态的正确使用可以准确表达过去发生的事情。

× although there are some music classes when I in elementary school

✓ although there were some music classes when I was in elementary school

这里 'when I in elementary school' 缺少动词 'was'，正确的表达应该是 'when I was in elementary school'，表示时间状语从句中的状态。

× and never learn it from the teacher.

✓ and never learned it from the teacher.

句子缺少主语 'I'，应该是 'and I never learned it from the teacher'，主语缺失导致句子不完整。

× Because I'm not really a good singer, so I always sing for myself to express my emotions.

✓ Because I'm not really a good singer, I always sing for myself to express my emotions.

句子中 'Because' 和 'so' 同时使用，造成连接词重复，应去掉其中一个。这里去掉 'so'，使句子更通顺。

× But maybe it's just humming, not it's just more humming, not singing.

✓ But maybe it's just humming, more humming, not singing.

句子中 'not it's just more humming' 结构重复且不通顺，应该简化为 'more humming, not singing'，避免重复和语法错误。

× Yes, I think singing can really bring happiness to everybody because seeing has the ability to affect others and when you sing happy songs it can bring joy to other people around you and also humming adding the effects are the same.

✓ Yes, I think singing can really bring happiness to everybody because singing has the ability to affect others, and when you sing happy songs, it can bring joy to other people around you. Also, humming has the same effect.

原句中 'seeing' 应为 'singing'，且句子结构混乱，缺少逗号和连接词，'humming adding the effects are the same' 语法错误，改为 'humming has the same effect' 更准确。需要注意拼写和句子结构的正确使用。