Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более естественным и структурированным. Избегайте повторений и неясных выражений. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и конкретизируйте причины вашего увлечения пением.

예시: Yes, I love singing because it makes me feel confident and happy. For example, when I sing, I imagine having a beautiful voice like Ariana Grande, which motivates me a lot.

제안: Ответ должен быть более чётким и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для плавности и уточните, как именно вы учились пению.

예시: I haven't had formal lessons in a studio or choir, but I have learned singing at home by watching YouTube videos to improve my vocal skills.

제안: Ответ должен быть более связным и логичным. Избегайте повторений и неуверенных выражений. Чётко сформулируйте, для кого вы хотите петь и почему.

예시: I like to sing for myself because it makes me happy and confident. Also, I hope my singing can bring joy to other people.

제안: Ответ должен быть более конкретным и логичным. Избегайте лишних деталей, не связанных с вопросом, и используйте связующие слова для плавности.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because many artists perform concerts regularly, and their music makes people feel joyful and relaxed.

× I love singing because when I'm singing I feel myself so beautiful and I'm so popularity in my mind that I have a beautiful voice and I have Ariana Grande and it's cool and it's so amazing to.

✓ I love singing because when I'm singing I feel so beautiful and I feel so popular in my mind that I have a beautiful voice like Ariana Grande and it's cool and so amazing too.

The pronoun 'myself' is incorrectly used; it should be omitted or replaced with 'so beautiful' to describe the feeling. Also, 'I'm so popularity' is incorrect; 'popularity' is a noun, but the sentence needs an adjective or adverb, so 'I feel so popular' is correct. The phrase 'I have Ariana Grande' is unclear; it likely means 'like Ariana Grande'. 'It's so amazing to' should be 'so amazing too' to express addition.

× I don't have experience like I'm learned singing in the studio, in the in the chorus, but I learned in the my home.

✓ I don't have experience like I learned singing in the studio, in the chorus, but I learned at my home.

The phrase 'I'm learned' is incorrect; the past tense 'I learned' should be used instead of present perfect or passive. Also, 'in the my home' is incorrect; it should be 'at my home' to indicate location.

× I turn turn up YouTube videos when I develop my vocal skills and I learned.

✓ I turn up YouTube videos when I develop my vocal skills and I learn.

The phrase 'turn turn up' is a repetition error; it should be 'turn up'. Also, 'I learned' is past tense but the context suggests ongoing action, so 'I learn' (present tense) is appropriate.

× For myself, I like sing for myself and know that I have a beautiful voice and when I sing for myself I feel so happy for me and I can to make people happy for my vocal skills, I don't know.

✓ For myself, I like to sing for myself and know that I have a beautiful voice, and when I sing for myself I feel so happy, and I can make people happy with my vocal skills, I don't know.

The phrase 'I like sing' should be 'I like to sing' (infinitive form). 'I feel so happy for me' is incorrect; 'for me' is unnecessary and redundant. 'I can to make' is incorrect; modal verb 'can' should be followed by base verb 'make'. 'Happy for my vocal skills' should be 'happy with my vocal skills' to use correct preposition.

× It's so simple question, Yes, because very many artists in America that do a concert every year, every season, every month and have a very more money for the songs and people feel happy.

✓ It's a simple question, yes, because many artists in America do concerts every year, every season, every month and earn a lot of money from the songs and people feel happy.

'So simple question' should be 'a simple question' (article error). 'Very many artists' is incorrect; 'many artists' is correct. 'Do a concert' should be 'do concerts' (plural). 'Have a very more money' is incorrect; 'earn a lot of money' is appropriate. 'For the songs' should be 'from the songs' (preposition error).