Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer has several pronunciation errors and word choice mistakes, such as 'seeing' instead of 'singing'. To improve, focus on accurate vocabulary and clear pronunciation. Also, try to keep your answer concise and directly related to the question without redundancy.

예시: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relieve stress and allows me to enjoy my own world.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains incorrect word choices like 'think systematic' and 'oral singer'. To improve, use correct vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

예시: No, I haven't learned to sing systematically because music theory seems complicated to me. Instead, I enjoy singing along with recordings, which is more relaxing and doesn't require formal training.

제안: Your answer has many incorrect word choices such as 'think' instead of 'sing' and unclear phrases like 'personal theory'. To improve, respond directly to the question with clear vocabulary and logical supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I usually sing for myself because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress. However, I also enjoy singing with my friends and family on special occasions.

제안: Your answer contains many vocabulary errors like 'seeing' instead of 'singing' and unclear expressions. To improve, use accurate vocabulary and provide specific examples with clear linking words to make your answer coherent and effective.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, singing at a party can create a joyful atmosphere, and even humming a tune while walking can brighten someone's day. Music connects people and spreads positive emotions.

× I love seeing.

✓ I love singing.

The student mistakenly used 'seeing' instead of 'singing'. 'Singing' is the correct present participle form of the verb 'sing' and fits the context of the question about liking singing.

× I think seeing can relieve my stress during the day and also let me release myself and enjoy my own world.

✓ I think singing can relieve my stress during the day and also let me release myself and enjoy my own world.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect here; it should be 'singing' to match the context of the conversation about singing. 'Singing' is the correct present participle form of the verb 'sing'.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

In American English, the past participle of 'learn' is commonly 'learned' rather than 'learnt'. Since the rest of the transcript uses American English conventions, 'learned' is preferred here.

× In fact, I haven't learned how to think systematic quickly.

✓ In fact, I haven't learned how to sing systematically yet.

The student incorrectly used 'think systematic quickly' which is unclear and grammatically incorrect. The intended meaning is likely about learning to sing systematically. 'Sing' replaces 'think', and 'systematically' is the correct adverb form modifying the verb.

× I think those music theory and things skills are too complicated for me.

✓ I think those music theory and related skills are too complicated for me.

The phrase 'things skills' is incorrect and unclear. Replacing it with 'related skills' clarifies the meaning and corrects the adjective usage.

× I usually sing with the oral singer.

✓ I usually sing with the original singer.

The phrase 'oral singer' is incorrect. The student likely meant 'original singer', referring to singing along with the original artist's voice.

× I think this can both listen and satisfy my own desire to sing.

✓ I think this can both satisfy my desire to sing and be enjoyable to listen to.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. The correction improves sentence structure and clarity by properly ordering the ideas and using correct verb forms.

× It's relatively free and don't need to learn skills.

✓ It's relatively free and doesn't require learning skills.

The subject 'It' is singular, so the verb should be 'doesn't' instead of 'don't'. Also, 'need to learn skills' is better expressed as 'requires learning skills' for clarity.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× I'd love to think for myself because it's a great way to express my emotions and relieve stress.

✓ I'd love to sing for myself because it's a great way to express my emotions and relieve stress.

The student mistakenly used 'think' instead of 'sing'. The correct verb in this context is 'sing'.

× Whenever I think I feel more relaxed and happy.

✓ Whenever I sing, I feel more relaxed and happy.

The verb 'think' is incorrect here; it should be 'sing' to match the context of singing bringing relaxation and happiness.

× It's like a personal theory.

✓ It's like a personal therapy.

The word 'theory' is incorrect in this context. The student likely meant 'therapy', which fits the idea of singing as a personal healing or stress-relief method.

× Same thing for me.

✓ It's the same for me.

The phrase 'Same thing for me' is informal and incomplete. 'It's the same for me' is grammatically correct and clearer.

× Of course, I also enjoy things with my friends and family sometimes, but singing for myself is something I do regularly to lift my breath.

✓ Of course, I also enjoy singing with my friends and family sometimes, but singing for myself is something I do regularly to lift my spirits.

The phrase 'enjoy things' is vague; specifying 'singing' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'lift my breath' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'lift my spirits' meaning to improve mood.

× I believe seeing can bring joy into people when I think I feel happy, and I hope my voice can also make others smile.

✓ I believe singing can bring joy to people; when I sing, I feel happy, and I hope my voice can also make others smile.

The student used 'seeing' and 'think' incorrectly instead of 'singing' and 'sing'. Also, 'bring joy into people' should be 'bring joy to people'.

× For example, seeing a child for some friends at a party can create a fun atmosphere, even just humming a town where walking can brighten someone's day.

✓ For example, singing for some friends at a party can create a fun atmosphere; even just humming a tune while walking can brighten someone's day.

The phrase 'seeing a child for some friends' is incorrect; it should be 'singing for some friends'. Also, 'humming a town where walking' is incorrect; it should be 'humming a tune while walking'. These corrections fix preposition and word choice errors.

× Music has a special power to connect people and spread positive emotions.

✓ Music has a special power to connect people and spread positive emotions.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.