Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "I often think in bathroom" which is unclear. To improve, try to use correct prepositions and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more effectively.

예시: Yes, definitely. I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relax. In fact, I often sing in the bathroom since I feel comfortable there.

제안: Your answer is relevant and informative but has minor grammatical issues, such as incorrect capitalization and tense consistency. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: Yes, I learned how to sing while I was in elementary school. I used to take regular music classes, and during that time, I learned a lot about musical instruments and various singing techniques.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains redundancy and awkward phrasing, such as "to whom I want to sing for" (double preposition). Also, try to avoid filler words like "uh" and make your sentences more concise and natural.

예시: I don't have a particular person or group I want to sing for because I enjoy singing privately. It makes me feel more comfortable and connected to myself.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but is grammatically incorrect and somewhat unclear. To improve, use correct sentence structures and linking words to express your ideas clearly and coherently. Avoid repetition and incomplete phrases.

예시: Undoubtedly, singing can bring happiness to people because it gives them a chance to connect with themselves. Moreover, it helps relax the mind and allows people to express themselves in ways they never thought possible.

× I often think in bathroom because I feel comfortable.

✓ I often think in the bathroom because I feel comfortable.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'bathroom'. In English, when referring to a specific place like 'bathroom' in this context, the definite article 'the' is required to indicate a particular location.

× Yes, I've learned how to sing While I was in my elementary school.

✓ Yes, I've learned how to sing while I was in elementary school.

The word 'While' should not be capitalized in the middle of the sentence. Also, the phrase 'my elementary school' is better expressed as 'elementary school' without 'my' to sound more natural in English.

× There is not any particular person or specific group of people to whom I want to sing for because I enjoy singing privately, because I feel more comfortable and more, uh, connected to myself.

✓ There is not any particular person or specific group of people for whom I want to sing because I enjoy singing privately, as I feel more comfortable and more, uh, connected to myself.

The phrase 'to whom I want to sing for' contains a redundant preposition 'for'. The correct form is 'for whom I want to sing'. Also, replacing the second 'because' with 'as' improves sentence flow and avoids repetition.

× Undoubtedly that singing can bring happiness to people as it gives them chance to be, to connect them, connect with themselves more, and it helps them to relax their mind, express themselves in ways they never thought.

✓ Undoubtedly, singing can bring happiness to people as it gives them a chance to connect with themselves more, and it helps them to relax their minds and express themselves in ways they never thought possible.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'chance'. Also, 'connect them' is incorrect; it should be 'connect with themselves'. 'Mind' should be plural 'minds' to agree with 'them'. Adding 'possible' at the end clarifies the expression. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.