Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，建议注意动词形式和句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and enjoy the beauty of music.

제안: 回答中表达不够清晰，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，增强表达的逻辑性。

예시: No, I haven't learned how to sing because it's not my major and I am not very interested in it.

제안: 回答内容混乱，表达不清，建议先明确主题句，再用连贯的细节支持，避免重复和语法错误。

예시: I would like to sing for my family because they haven't heard me sing before. If I have the chance, I will sing some songs to show my love for them.

제안: 回答表达不连贯且有语法错误，建议使用简单明了的句子，合理使用连接词，使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it is full of energy and helps people relax. When people sing, they can feel the passion of life.

× I think singing is an activity that help me relaxing and enjoying the beauty of music.

✓ I think singing is an activity that helps me relax and enjoy the beauty of music.

动词help后面接动词时，应该用动词原形而不是动名词。relaxing和enjoying应改为relax和enjoy。

× No, because I'm not in this major and my interest in singing is not so much, so I didn't try to learn something about it.

✓ No, because I'm not in this major and my interest in singing is not very strong, so I haven't tried to learn anything about it.

句中表达兴趣不强时用not so much不太准确，改为not very strong更合适。后半句时态应与现在相关，使用现在完成时haven't tried更合适。

× Maybe I want to sing for my family because actually they haven't listen.

✓ Maybe I want to sing for my family because actually they haven't listened.

动词listen后应使用过去分词listened构成完成时态，表示他们还没有听过。

× My voice is singing.

✓ My voice is singing well.

原句结构不完整，缺少描述词，补充well使句子完整且表达清晰。

× So if one day I have this opportunity, I will try to sing.

✓ So if one day I have the opportunity, I will try to sing.

the opportunity更符合特指某个机会的表达。

× We sing to show my love of of saying maybe some some songs then including family members.

✓ I sing to show my love by singing some songs, including those for my family members.

原句结构混乱，重复词语，且主语不一致，改为清晰表达主语和动作的句子。

× Yes, of course singing is as I have say that singing is full of an energy and can make people feel relaxing and I sing some music they have they have some they have the passion of life.

✓ Yes, of course, as I have said, singing is full of energy and can make people feel relaxed. When I sing some music, it has the passion of life.

have say应为have said，动词时态错误。an energy中energy不可数，去掉冠词。feel relaxing应为feel relaxed，形容人的感受。句子过长且重复，拆分为两句更清晰。

× So when people singing they can also feeling the energy that can turn into.

✓ So when people are singing, they can also feel the energy that can be transformed.

people后应使用进行时are singing。feel后不应加ing形式，应为feel。句尾表达不完整，补充完整表达。