Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言不够自然，句子结构重复且有语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用更准确的时态和表达。

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and enjoy the beauty of music. Also, I often sing with my friends, which makes it more enjoyable.

제안: 回答中时态使用不准确，句子结构较为混乱。建议使用正确的时态，简洁表达原因，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: No, I haven't learned how to sing because I was busy preparing for my university entrance exam during my final school years. However, I plan to spend some time learning singing at university.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用正确的语法，并明确表达感谢父母的意图。

예시: I want to sing for my parents because they work very hard. Singing thank-you songs can help them relax and make our family happier.

제안: 回答中存在多处语法错误和表达不清晰，且句子重复。建议使用简单明了的句子，避免重复，并用具体例子支持观点。

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and enjoy music. For example, I always feel happy when I sing.

× Yes, I like singing because when I was singing I can relax.

✓ Yes, I like singing because when I sing I can relax.

这里时态不一致，前半句用的是一般现在时，后半句却用了过去进行时，应该保持时态一致，使用一般现在时。

× Often I can.

✓ Often I can.

该句不完整，缺少谓语动词，建议补充完整句子，如："Often I can relax." 但根据题目要求只纠正语法错误，此处不做改动。

× I can relax and I can feel the beauty of the music and what I was saying.

✓ I can relax and I can feel the beauty of the music and what I am singing.

这里时态不一致，前半句是一般现在时，后半句用了过去进行时，应该保持时态一致，使用一般现在时。

× I can I can find some friends to sing with me.

✓ I can find some friends to sing with me.

句子中重复了"I can"，应删除多余部分。

× No, I haven't learn how to sing because I'm in the seniors, because I was in the final years of my school.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing because I'm in the seniors, because I was in the final years of my school.

"haven't"后面应接过去分词，"learn"应改为过去分词"learned"。

× So I'm busy with preparing for my university entrance exam and so I didn't have any time to learn how to sing.

✓ So I'm busy preparing for my university entrance exam and so I didn't have any time to learn how to sing.

"busy with preparing"结构不正确，正确用法是"busy preparing"。

× But in the university I will have, I will spend some time to learn singing.

✓ But in the university I will spend some time learning to sing.

"will have"多余，应删除；"learn singing"应改为"learning to sing"，符合动词+动名词结构。

× I want to sing for my parents because they are very because they are very busy and they are working.

✓ I want to sing for my parents because they are very busy and they are working.

句子中"because they are very"重复，应删除多余部分。

× I want to sing thanks thank you songs for my parents to let them feel more relax and it can also makes them makes our family more Hannah mommy.

✓ I want to sing thank you songs for my parents to let them feel more relaxed and it can also make our family happier.

"feel more relax"应为"feel more relaxed"，形容词形式；"makes them makes"重复，应改为"make"；"more Hannah mommy"不合适，改为"happier"。

× Sure, I think seeing can bring happiness to people because when people are saying they can feel they will they will breathe more often and they and they can feel the they can relax the beauty of the music.

✓ Sure, I think singing can bring happiness to people because when people are singing they can feel they will breathe more often and they can relax and feel the beauty of the music.

"seeing"应为"singing"；"are saying"应为"are singing"；句子中多处重复和缺少连词，需调整使句子通顺。

× Just for example. To me, I have always been happy when I were seeing.

✓ Just for example. To me, I have always been happy when I was singing.

"were"应改为"was"，主语是第一人称单数，动词应用过去式"was"；"seeing"应为"singing"。