Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤り（"hobbies"は単数形の"hobby"にすべき）や冗長な表現があります。また、文をつなぐ接続詞が不足しているため、より自然で効果的な回答にするために、文法の正確さと接続詞の使用に注意しましょう。

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me reduce stress, and it is my favorite hobby.

제안: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭な部分があります（"learned how to thinks"は誤り）。また、動詞の三単現の誤用（"sings"）も見られます。より明確で自然な表現にするために、正しい文法と語彙を使い、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: I have never learned how to sing, but I enjoy singing and usually sing for 30 minutes every day.

제안: 回答は簡潔で直接的ですが、もう少し詳細を加えるとより良いです。例えば、なぜ母親のために歌いたいのか理由を述べると、内容が豊かになります。

예시: I want to sing for my mother because she always supports me and I want to show my appreciation.

제안: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです（"scrambling happiness"は不適切な表現）。また、文が途中で終わっており、内容が不完全です。正しい表現を使い、文を完結させ、具体的な理由を述べるようにしましょう。

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps reduce stress and makes them feel relaxed.

× Yes, I like singing, it helps to reduce stress and it is my favorite hobbies.

✓ Yes, I like singing, it helps to reduce stress and it is my favorite hobby.

The word 'hobbies' is plural, but 'favorite' implies a singular item. Therefore, 'hobby' should be singular to match the context.

× I have never learned how to thinks, but I like singing so I usually sings for 30 minutes per each day.

✓ I have never learned how to sing, but I like singing so I usually sing for 30 minutes each day.

The verb 'thinks' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'sing' in the infinitive form after 'how to'. Also, 'sings' should be 'sing' because the subject 'I' requires the base form without 's'. 'Per each day' is awkward; 'each day' is more natural.

× I usually sings for 30 minutes per each day.

✓ I usually sing for 30 minutes each day.

The phrase 'per each day' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'each day' or 'per day'. Also, 'sings' should be 'sing' for subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I think singing scrambling happiness to people because singing reduce stress and feel relax.

✓ Yes, I think singing brings happiness to people because singing reduces stress and helps people feel relaxed.

The word 'scrambling' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'brings'. Also, 'reduce' should be 'reduces' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. 'Feel relax' should be 'feel relaxed' to use the correct adjective form.

× It's a great thing and.

✓ It's a great thing.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' without completing the thought, which is a sentence structure error. The sentence should be complete and clear.