Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法の誤りや単語の使い方の間違いを修正し、より自然で効果的な表現を使うことが重要です。例えば、「singing is relax」ではなく「singing is relaxing」や「makes me feel exciting」ではなく「makes me feel excited」と言うべきです。また、文を簡潔にし、冗長な表現を避けることも大切です。

예시: Yes, I like singing because it is relaxing and makes me feel happy. For example, I enjoy going to karaoke with my friends, who are very good singers. Their singing always excites me.

제안: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。例えば、「If I have a lot of money I going to at school for singing」は「If I had enough money, I would go to a singing school」と言い換えるべきです。より正確な文法と自然な表現を使い、内容を明確に伝える練習をしましょう。

예시: No, I haven't learned how to sing, but I want to because I enjoy singing. If I had enough money, I would attend a singing school, but it's a bit expensive for me right now.

제안: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭な部分があります。例えば、「my friend is very kindness」ではなく「my friend is very kind」、「my friend is very exciting when I listen my sing」は意味が通じません。より正確な表現と具体的な説明を心がけましょう。

예시: I want to sing for my friend because she is very kind. When I sing for her, she feels happy, and that makes me feel happy and excited too.

제안: 全体的に良い回答ですが、さらに具体的な例や自分の経験を加えるとより説得力が増します。また、接続詞を使って文の流れをより滑らかにすると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because songs often express emotions that everyone can relate to. For example, when I listen to a talented singer, their voice makes me feel joyful and relaxed. Moreover, singing with friends helps us connect and share positive feelings, which enhances our happiness.

× Yes I do because singing is relax and makes me feel happy.

✓ Yes I do because singing is relaxing and makes me feel happy.

The adjective 'relax' is incorrect here; the correct form is the present participle 'relaxing' to describe the effect of singing. Using 'relaxing' properly modifies the noun 'singing' to express that it causes relaxation.

× For example I like go to the karaoke with my friends.

✓ For example, I like going to the karaoke with my friends.

After the verb 'like', the gerund form (verb + -ing) should be used to indicate enjoyment of an activity. Therefore, 'go' should be changed to 'going'.

× My friends is so good at singing so my friends makes me feel exciting.

✓ My friends are so good at singing so my friends make me feel excited.

'Friends' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is', and 'make' instead of 'makes'. Also, 'exciting' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'excited' to describe the feeling of the speaker.

× No I haven't but I want to learn how to sing because I like to sing but I'm not good at singing.

✓ No, I haven't but I want to learn how to sing because I like to sing but I'm not good at singing.

This sentence is grammatically correct; only a comma is added after 'No' for clarity. No tense error is present.

× If I have a lot of money I going to at school for singing because a little bit expensive so I can't go.

✓ If I have a lot of money, I am going to go to a school for singing because it is a little bit expensive so I can't go now.

The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' before 'going' to form the future tense 'I am going'. Also, 'to at school' is incorrect; it should be 'to a school'. The phrase 'a little bit expensive' needs the verb 'is' to be complete. The sentence is corrected to proper future tense and clearer structure.

× I want sing for my friend because my friend is very kindness so my friend is very exciting when I listen my sing so it makes me feel happy and very exciting.

✓ I want to sing for my friend because my friend is very kind, so my friend is very excited when I sing for them, which makes me feel happy and very excited.

'Want sing' should be 'want to sing' to use the infinitive form. 'Kindness' is a noun; the adjective 'kind' is correct here. 'Exciting' describes something that causes excitement; to describe a person's feeling, 'excited' is correct. 'Listen my sing' is incorrect; it should be 'when I sing for them'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.