Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用正确的时态。

예시: Yes, I like singing because I think I sing well, and it helps me relax when I feel tired.

제안: 回答较为完整，但句子连接不够流畅。建议使用连接词使表达更连贯，同时注意句子简洁。

예시: No, I haven't learnt how to sing because I am a high school student and spend most of my time studying. Although I love singing, I don't have spare time to take lessons.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用正确的动词和时态，简化句子并明确表达意图。

예시: I want to sing for my idol JoJo because he is an amazing singer. His songs inspire me when I am tired, and singing for him would be a great honor to show my appreciation.

제안: 回答不够清晰，存在语法和表达错误。建议使用简单明了的句子，明确表达观点并提供具体理由。

예시: Yes, singing can bring happiness because music helps people relax and also brings them closer together by sharing emotions.

× I think I sing really good and also singing is a way to relax myself when I was when I when I was tired.

✓ I think I sing really well and also singing is a way to relax myself when I was tired.

这里“good”是形容词，用来修饰名词，而“sing”是动词，应该用副词“well”来修饰动词。

× I think I sing really good and also singing is a way to relax myself when I was when I when I was tired.

✓ I think I sing really well and also singing is a way to relax myself when I was tired.

句中“when I was when I when I was tired”重复且冗余，应简化为“when I was tired”。

× No. First, I didn't have spare time to learn it.

✓ No. First, I didn't have spare time to learn it.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× Because I'm a high school student.

✓ Because I'm a high school student.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× I always spend much of a large part of my time studying.

✓ I always spend a large part of my time studying.

“much of a large part”表达重复且不自然，应简化为“a large part”。

× So although I love singing, I didn't have time to learn it.

✓ So although I love singing, I didn't have time to learn it.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× I want to see for my idol JoJo because he is an amazing singer and his song, his songs inspire me when I was tired and seeing for him will be a great chance and honour to show my appreciation for him.

✓ I want to sing for my idol JoJo because he is an amazing singer and his songs inspire me when I was tired. Singing for him will be a great chance and honour to show my appreciation for him.

“see for”用法错误，应为“sing for”。另外，句子过长且结构混乱，分成两句更清晰。

× his song, his songs inspire me when I was tired

✓ his songs inspire me when I was tired

“his song,”重复且多余，应去掉。

× stop the music with the melody is really a way for people to relax themselves

✓ listening to music with a melody is really a way for people to relax themselves

“stop the music with the melody”表达不正确，应为“listening to music with a melody”。

× stop the music with the melody is really a way for people to relax themselves and also singing music can make people know each other well.

✓ Listening to music with a melody is really a way for people to relax themselves, and also singing can help people get to know each other well.

“singing music”表达不自然，应改为“singing”。“make people know each other well”应改为“help people get to know each other well”。