Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'seeing' thay vì 'singing', 'other the others' không đúng). Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và sử dụng từ đúng ngữ cảnh để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có một số phần lặp lại, bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi sai.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions creatively. Moreover, singing often improves my mood, and I feel happy when others enjoy my voice.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'teach teach' và 'how to how to' là lỗi lặp từ. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi sai ngữ pháp. Bạn cũng nên dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy luyện tập cách diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách tự nhiên và chính xác.

예시: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons because I believe singing should be free and personal. However, when I was a child, my mother often taught me how to release my voice properly.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, ví dụ 'sing for my friends is' nên là 'singing for my friends is'. Bạn nên kết hợp các câu lại để tránh câu ngắn rời rạc và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I want to sing for my friends because I feel a bit shy to perform in public. Additionally, singing for them is a meaningful way to show my love and thoughtfulness.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng đại từ, ví dụ 'he' nên là 'it' khi nói về singing. Câu trả lời hơi khó hiểu và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên diễn đạt ý tưởng rõ ràng hơn và dùng từ phù hợp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và dễ hiểu.

예시: Yes, singing can definitely bring happiness to people because a beautiful voice that comes from the heart can express appreciation and empathy to others.

× Furthermore, seeing can also boost my mood and sometimes other the others hear my voice can also happy too.

✓ Furthermore, singing can also boost my mood and sometimes when others hear my voice, they can also feel happy.

The sentence contains incorrect pronoun usage and unclear subject references. 'Seeing' should be 'singing'. 'Other the others' is incorrect; it should be 'others'. Also, 'can also happy too' lacks a verb and proper structure; it should be 'they can also feel happy'. Correct pronoun and subject-verb agreement improve clarity.

× No, I have never learned how to sing before as I think singing must be a freedom to sing in my myself way.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing before because I think singing must be a freedom to sing in my own way.

The sentence uses 'as' incorrectly to mean 'because'. Also, 'my myself way' is incorrect; it should be 'my own way'. The past tense 'have never learned' is correct here, but the conjunction and pronoun usage need correction.

× However, when I was a child, my mother often teach teach me how to how to release my voice.

✓ However, when I was a child, my mother often taught me how to release my voice.

The verb 'teach' should be in the past tense 'taught' to agree with the past time reference 'when I was a child'. Also, repeated words 'teach teach' and 'how to how to' are errors and should be removed.

× I want to sing for my friends as I find a little shy to sing before the public.

✓ I want to sing for my friends as I feel a little shy to sing in public.

The phrase 'find a little shy' is incorrect; 'feel a little shy' is the correct expression. Also, 'before the public' is better expressed as 'in public'.

× Additionally, sing for my friends is a way to show my love and thoughtfulness for them. Which is really meaningful.

✓ Additionally, singing for my friends is a way to show my love and thoughtfulness for them, which is really meaningful.

The sentence fragment 'Which is really meaningful.' should be connected to the previous sentence to form a complete sentence. Also, 'sing' should be 'singing' to function as a noun (gerund) here.

× Yes he can definitely bring happiness to people because one beautiful voice that really is from one heart can convey their appreciation and also empathy for opposite.

✓ Yes, singing can definitely bring happiness to people because a beautiful voice that truly comes from the heart can convey appreciation and empathy to others.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrectly used to refer to singing; it should be 'singing'. 'One beautiful voice' should be 'a beautiful voice'. 'Their appreciation' is unclear; 'appreciation' without 'their' is better. 'Empathy for opposite' is incorrect; it should be 'empathy to others' or 'empathy for others'.