Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more structured and clear by starting with a direct response, then adding specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, instead of saying "I have a participated advance in the competition," say "I have participated in singing competitions." Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress. For instance, I was part of a singing group at my school and even participated in several competitions. Additionally, singing is a family tradition, which makes it even more special to me.

제안: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "also" or "in addition" to connect ideas. Correct grammar mistakes such as "give" to "gave" and avoid filler words. Make your answer concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, I learned to sing at school where a teacher gave us singing lessons. In addition, I took private lessons outside school because I love singing and it helps me relax and relieve stress.

제안: Make your answer more complete and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid incomplete sentences. For example, finish your last sentence properly and clarify your points with specific reasons.

예시: I want to sing for my family because they are my biggest supporters. When I sing for them, it helps everyone feel relaxed and happy. Therefore, I enjoy sharing this happiness with them through my singing.

제안: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to explain your reasons. Also, correct grammar mistakes and avoid incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people because listening to someone sing can help reduce stress. For example, it allows people to express their emotions and feel more joyful.

× I have a participated advance in the competition as well

✓ I have participated in the competition as well

The phrase 'have a participated advance' is incorrect because 'participated' is a past participle and should not be preceded by 'a' or followed by 'advance' in this context. The correct form is 'have participated' to indicate past experience without the unnecessary words.

× as I was part of singing, grew up in my school

✓ as I was part of singing, grew up in my school

The phrase 'part of singing' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'part of a singing group' or 'part of singing activities'. However, since the instruction is to only correct mistakes that meet the grammar problem types, and 'part of singing' is more a vocabulary or phrase issue, no correction is made here.

× we have a teacher over there who give us singing lessons

✓ we have a teacher over there who gives us singing lessons

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'teacher', which is singular, so the verb should be 'gives' to agree in number with the singular subject.

× I have taken some lessons from outside for for a personal tutor

✓ I have taken some lessons from outside with a personal tutor

The phrase 'lessons from outside for for a personal tutor' is incorrect. The preposition 'from' is used correctly to indicate source, but 'for for' is a repetition and 'for a personal tutor' is incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate accompaniment is 'with'.

× it gives me, I feel just relax and it relieves my stress while I was singing

✓ it gives me a feeling of relaxation and it relieves my stress while I am singing

The phrase 'I feel just relax' is incorrect; it should be 'I feel relaxed' or 'a feeling of relaxation'. Also, 'while I was singing' should be 'while I am singing' to match the present tense context.

× it leave the stress for the people

✓ it relieves the stress for the people

The verb 'leave' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'relieve'. Also, 'leave' is base form and does not fit the sentence. 'Relieves' is the correct third person singular present tense verb.

× when I was singing or like anyone else there singing

✓ when I am singing or like anyone else there singing

The tense should be present to match the general statement. Also, 'there singing' is awkward; it should be 'singing there' or 'singing as well' but since only grammar problem types are to be corrected, tense is corrected here.

× someone who's like singing, you go

✓ someone who's singing, you go

The phrase 'like singing' is incorrect here; 'like' is unnecessary and disrupts the meaning. The correct form is 'someone who's singing'.