Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc. Bạn nên tránh những câu không hoàn chỉnh và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy tập trung vào việc diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách tự nhiên và tránh lặp lại từ ngữ không cần thiết.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. When I sing, I feel calm and happy, which makes it a great way to relieve stress.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là thì động từ và cấu trúc câu. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và đầy đủ hơn, tránh lặp từ và nói lắp. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I have never taken professional singing classes, but I really want to try learning someday because I enjoy singing and want to improve my skills.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự hoàn chỉnh và rõ ràng. Bạn nên tránh nói lặp lại và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy trình bày ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời có tính logic hơn.

예시: I want to sing for my family and friends because I feel more comfortable and confident when I am with people who understand me.

제안: Bạn nên hoàn thành câu trả lời và tránh nói dở dang. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích rõ hơn về ý kiến của bạn. Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because music is a unique way to improve mental health and help people feel better emotionally.

× Like singing, Well, of course I do, because when I sing I feel like I can't. Like myself would be immense into a melt.

✓ I like singing. Well, of course I do, because when I sing I feel like I can't stop. It feels like myself would melt completely.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear, lacking proper sentence structure. It needs to be divided into clear sentences and rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It is something that's has melody and it's just really makes me feel relaxed.

✓ It is something that has melody and it really makes me feel relaxed.

The phrase 'that's has' is incorrect; 'that has' is correct. Also, 'it's just really makes' is redundant; 'it really makes' is correct. Pronouns and verbs must agree and be used properly.

× Honestly, I really want to try and someday one day, but I've never take any professional classes about singing.

✓ Honestly, I really want to try someday, but I've never taken any professional classes about singing.

The verb 'take' should be in the past participle form 'taken' after 'have never' to form the present perfect tense correctly.

× So yeah, I I will want to try to take.

✓ So yeah, I want to try to take.

The phrase 'will want to' is awkward here; simple present 'want to' is more appropriate to express desire.

× So yeah, my family and friends, obviously I, I just feel, I think I just feel more comfortable when I'm around, when I'm at like I'm at, I'm not around with people who get me and they are my.

✓ So yeah, my family and friends, obviously. I just feel more comfortable when I'm around people who understand me and are close to me.

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing. It needs to be restructured into clear, complete sentences for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, music is something that's just so different with other like treatment methods to treat the mental health issues and it's just a different way to.

✓ Yes, music is something that is very different from other treatment methods for mental health issues, and it's just a different way to help.

The sentence is incomplete and awkwardly structured. It needs to be completed and rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.