Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「from in front of the audience」は不自然で、「in front of an audience」が適切です。また、冗長な表現を避け、より自然な英語にするために簡潔に述べることが重要です。

예시: No, I don't like singing because I am shy and feel embarrassed when I sing in front of an audience.

제안: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「learn about how to think」は不適切で、「learn how to sing」が正しい表現です。また、文を簡潔にし、正しい語順で話すことが必要です。

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing. I just enjoy listening to my favorite music and singing alone.

제안: 文が長くて複雑で、意味が分かりにくいです。繰り返しや冗長な表現を避け、簡潔で明確な文を作ることが大切です。また、接続詞を使って論理的に話をつなげる練習をしましょう。

예시: I like to sing for my mother because she enjoys music and doesn't mind if I sing badly. This makes me feel comfortable and less embarrassed.

제안: 内容は良いですが、文法と語順の誤りが多いです。例えば、「the people generally the smile will be smile」は不自然です。より自然で正確な表現を使い、接続詞で文をつなげると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it helps reduce stress and makes people smile, which improves their health.

× Unfortunately, I don't like singing because I am a shy guy, so every time I sing a song from in front of the audience, I will be very embarrassed.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't like singing because I am a shy guy, so every time I sing a song in front of the audience, I am very embarrassed.

The phrase 'from in front of the audience' is incorrect. The preposition 'from' should be removed to correctly use 'in front of the audience'. This is a preposition usage error (ID 11). Also, 'will be' is changed to 'am' to match the habitual present tense context (ID 6).

× No, I never learn about how to think, I just listen to my favorite music and like the sing a song alone.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing, I just listen to my favorite music and like to sing a song alone.

The verb 'learn' should be in the present perfect tense 'have never learned' to indicate experience up to now (ID 5). Also, 'how to think' is incorrect; it should be 'how to sing'. 'Like the sing a song' is incorrect; it should be 'like to sing a song'. These are verb form and infinitive usage errors (ID 8).

× I like to sing for sing a song for my mother because my mother is really like to sing and listen to music and my mother doesn't care about me, so I will not be embarrassed in front of my mother.

✓ I like to sing a song for my mother because she really likes to sing and listen to music and she doesn't care about me, so I am not embarrassed in front of her.

The sentence has redundant and incorrect pronoun usage. 'My mother is really like to sing' should be 'she really likes to sing'. Also, 'my mother doesn't care about me' is correct but repetitive; pronouns 'she' and 'her' are better for natural flow. 'I will not be embarrassed' is changed to 'I am not embarrassed' to reflect habitual action (ID 12 and 6).

× Yeah, I think so. The singing can improve the health condition. When people sing a song, the people generally the smile will be smile and it reduces stress and make it be happier.

✓ Yeah, I think so. Singing can improve health. When people sing a song, they generally smile and it reduces stress and makes them happier.

'The singing' should be 'Singing' without 'the' because it refers to the activity in general (ID 17). 'The health condition' should be 'health' as a general concept (ID 17). 'The people generally the smile will be smile' is incorrect; it should be 'they generally smile' (ID 26). 'Make it be happier' should be 'makes them happier' to agree with singular subject and correct pronoun (ID 27 and 12).