Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally natural and effective, but you could improve coherence by using linking words and slightly more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid redundancy such as "feel relaxed and refreshed" which are similar ideas. Try to combine ideas more smoothly.

예시: I really love singing because it helps me relax and refresh my mind. For example, when I sing my favorite songs, I can express my emotions and forget about stressful situations, which makes singing a very enjoyable activity for me.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains errors that affect understanding, such as "learned to think" instead of "learned to sing". Also, some parts are confusing and irrelevant (e.g., "I often drink"). Focus on directly answering the question with clear, relevant details and correct vocabulary.

예시: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, I enjoy singing along to songs by following the lyrics, especially those I know well.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and redundancy, such as "more easy because it is easier." Try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to improve flow.

예시: I want to sing for my brother because we share the same taste in music. Therefore, it feels easier and more comfortable to sing for him.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but contains unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes, such as "Just be just of course" and "completely immense on the taste." Try to use simpler, clearer expressions and correct grammar to convey your ideas effectively.

예시: Of course, I think singing can bring happiness to people. When we sing, we can fully immerse ourselves in the music and express our anxiety and stress from daily life, which helps us feel better.

× I really love singing because it's helped me feel relaxed and refreshed, especially when I sing my favorite song.

✓ I really love singing because it helps me feel relaxed and refreshed, especially when I sing my favorite song.

The phrase 'it's helped' is in the present perfect tense, which is inconsistent with the general present tense context of the sentence. Using 'it helps' (present simple) correctly expresses a habitual action or general truth.

× Singing allows me to express my emotion and forget about any situation, which makes it a very enjoyable activity for me.

✓ Singing allows me to express my emotions and forget about any situation, which makes it a very enjoyable activity for me.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because it refers to multiple feelings that one can express, not just a single emotion.

× No, I have never learned to think.

✓ No, I have never learned to sing.

The phrase 'learned to think' is incorrect in this context; the question is about learning to sing, so the verb should be 'sing' instead of 'think'.

× I often drink, sing, follow to the lyrics of the song that I am listening to, or I can sing a song that I will remember all of the lyrics.

✓ I often drink, sing, follow the lyrics of the song that I am listening to, or I can sing a song for which I remember all of the lyrics.

The verb 'follow' does not require the preposition 'to' when used with 'lyrics'. Also, 'sing a song that I will remember all of the lyrics' is awkward; it is better to say 'sing a song for which I remember all of the lyrics' to clarify the meaning.

× I want to sing for my brother because he has the same favorite types of music with me so that is more easy because it is easier and more comfortable when I sing for him.

✓ I want to sing for my brother because he has the same favorite type of music as me, so it is easier and more comfortable when I sing for him.

The phrase 'types of music' should be singular 'type of music' to match 'same favorite'. Also, 'with me' should be 'as me' to correctly express similarity. 'More easy' is incorrect; 'easier' is the correct comparative form.

× Just be just of course, because when we are singing, we can completely immense on the taste of the music and we can express all of the anxiety and the stress about our work in the daily life.

✓ Just be, of course, because when we are singing, we can completely immerse ourselves in the taste of the music and express all of the anxiety and stress about our work in daily life.

The phrase 'Just be just of course' is unclear and likely a mistake; 'Just be, of course,' is clearer. The verb 'immense' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'immerse'. Also, 'immerse' requires an object, so 'ourselves' is added. 'The anxiety and the stress' can be simplified to 'anxiety and stress'. 'In the daily life' should be 'in daily life' for natural expression.