Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy tập trung vào việc diễn đạt ý một cách mạch lạc và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it gives me positive energy and helps me relax after a stressful day at school. Singing also improves my vocal strength and control.

제안: Bạn cần trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh lặp lại từ ngữ không cần thiết. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ chính xác, ví dụ như 'learned' thay vì 'loan'. Hãy trình bày rõ ràng về việc bạn đã học hát như thế nào và ai là người dạy bạn.

예시: Yes, I have learned how to sing from my piano teacher. He taught me how to control my voice and express my emotions through singing.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn còn lộn xộn và khó hiểu. Bạn nên sắp xếp ý tưởng rõ ràng, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy tập trung vào việc giải thích lý do bạn muốn hát cho mẹ một cách mạch lạc và cụ thể hơn.

예시: I want to sing for my mother because she enjoys my voice. Singing for her makes her happy, especially after a hard and stressful day at work.

제안: Bạn cần cải thiện cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời trở nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp. Nên trình bày ý kiến của bạn một cách logic và có ví dụ minh họa cụ thể.

예시: Yes, I believe singing is an important part of life. It helps people relieve stress and brings positive energy and happiness to the soul.

× I really enjoy singing because singing bring me a lot of positive energy and help me reduce thread food after stressed day at school.

✓ I really enjoy singing because singing brings me a lot of positive energy and helps me reduce tiredness after a stressful day at school.

The verbs 'bring' and 'help' need to agree with the singular subject 'singing', so they should be 'brings' and 'helps'. Also, 'thread food' is incorrect; it should be 'tiredness'. 'Stressed day' should be 'stressful day' to correctly describe the noun.

× Not only real things, stressful singing can't help me improve my strength and improve my improving my frequency voice.

✓ Not only real things, stressful singing can't help me improve my strength and improve my frequency voice.

The phrase 'improving my frequency voice' is redundant and incorrect. It should be 'improve my frequency voice'. Also, the sentence is unclear; 'Not only real things' is confusing and likely incorrect in context.

× Yes, I really enjoy I really enjoy singing. So I have I have a loan. I have learned how to sing by by my piano teacher.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing. So I have learned how to sing from my piano teacher.

The phrase 'I have a loan' is incorrect and irrelevant here. The correct past tense form is 'I have learned'. Also, 'by by' is a repetition error and 'by my piano teacher' should be 'from my piano teacher' to indicate the source of learning.

× He teach me how to control my frequency, my voice and how to show my strength for another people.

✓ He teaches me how to control my frequency, my voice, and how to show my strength to other people.

The verb 'teach' must be in third person singular form 'teaches' to agree with the subject 'He'. Also, 'for another people' is incorrect; it should be 'to other people'.

× I want to sing for my MO mother because my mother really like my voice when I singing, I want to show my friend by singing for my mother to bring the happiness for my mother and she's very hard but a stressful day as a company, so I will bring a lot of positive energy for.

✓ I want to sing for my mother because she really likes my voice when I sing. I want to show my friends by singing for my mother to bring happiness to her. She has very hard and stressful days at work, so I want to bring a lot of positive energy to her.

'MO mother' is unclear and likely a typo; corrected to 'my mother'. 'My mother really like' should be 'she really likes' for subject-verb agreement and pronoun clarity. 'When I singing' should be 'when I sing' (present tense). 'Show my friend by singing for my mother' is unclear; corrected to 'show my friends by singing for my mother'. 'Bring the happiness for my mother' should be 'bring happiness to her'. 'She's very hard but a stressful day as a company' is incorrect; corrected to 'She has very hard and stressful days at work'. 'Bring a lot of positive energy for' is incomplete; corrected to 'bring a lot of positive energy to her'.

× Yes thing is very important in the life think it is one of the part of life.

✓ Yes, singing is very important in life; I think it is one part of life.

The sentence lacks clarity and proper pronouns. 'Yes thing' is unclear; likely 'Yes, singing'. 'In the life' should be 'in life'. 'Think it is one of the part of life' should be 'I think it is one part of life'.

× Singing can help help us healings or souls and and really stress real stressful not only really stressful.

✓ Singing can help us heal our souls and relieve real stress, not just mild stress.

'Help help us healings or souls' is incorrect; corrected to 'help us heal our souls'. 'And and really stress real stressful not only really stressful' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; corrected to 'and relieve real stress, not just mild stress'.

× Singing bring a lot of positive energy and souls or strength.

✓ Singing brings a lot of positive energy and soul strength.

The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'Singing'. 'Souls or strength' is unclear; corrected to 'soul strength' for clarity.