Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言不够连贯，存在语法和发音错误，且句子结构不完整。建议练习使用完整句子表达情绪和原因，避免断断续续。

예시: Yes, I like singing very much, especially when I feel depressed or worried about assignments. I think singing is a great way to relax and unwind myself.

제안: 回答中断断续续，缺乏连贯性，且表达不够自然。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达曾经参加唱歌俱乐部学习唱歌的经历。

예시: Yes, I used to attend a singing club where I learned how to sing in a more professional way under the guidance of a mentor.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清的问题，建议练习使用连贯的句子表达想为父母唱歌的原因，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: If possible, I want to sing for my parents because it is a way to express my emotions and gratitude, which can make them feel happy.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，建议使用正确的语法和更贴切的词汇表达唱歌带来快乐的观点，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: Yes, I think singing is a great way to express emotions such as happiness or kindness. It allows people to convey their feelings in a vivid and lively manner.

× Yes, I do like singing, especially when I feel. Depressed or? Maybe worrying about some. The assignment, I think Casini is a great way to. Relax and unwind myself.

✓ Yes, I do like singing, especially when I feel depressed or maybe worried about some assignments. I think singing is a great way to relax and unwind myself.

原句断句不合理，导致句子结构混乱。应将断句合并，形成完整的句子，表达清晰。

× I think Casini is a great way to. Relax and unwind myself.

✓ I think singing is a great way to relax and unwind myself.

原句中“Casini”应为“singing”，且不需要冠词。此处是拼写错误，需改正。

× Yes, I used to attend a. Singing club to learn about. How to sing? In a more. A professional way. Following a pro. Mentor and sing.

✓ Yes, I used to attend a singing club to learn how to sing in a more professional way, following a pro mentor and singing.

原句断句过多，导致句子不完整且难以理解。应合并断句，形成完整连贯的句子。

× If posable. I want to sing for my parents because I think. In this way, I can express my emotional feelings and. Maybe thankful feelings to them.

✓ If possible, I want to sing for my parents because I think in this way, I can express my emotional and thankful feelings to them.

“posable”拼写错误，应为“possible”。“thankful feelings”前不需要“maybe”，且“emotional feelings and maybe thankful feelings”表达重复，应合并。

× And makes them feel happy. In the more emotional way.

✓ And make them feel happy in a more emotional way.

句子缺少主语，且“makes”应改为“make”与前文主语保持一致。

× Yes, I do think sing is a great way to express some emotional feelings to others.

✓ Yes, I do think singing is a great way to express some emotional feelings to others.

“sing”应使用动名词形式“singing”，表示动作的名词化。

× Like happiness or generosity? In this way, these emotional feelings could express in a more vivid and lively method.

✓ Like happiness or generosity. In this way, these emotional feelings could be expressed in a more vivid and lively way.

“express”应使用被动语态“be expressed”，且“method”改为“way”更符合表达习惯。