Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“seeing”应为“singing”，“business”应为“work”。建议使用更自然的表达方式，避免冗长和不连贯。

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because music is a universal language that connects people from different cultures. It helps me relax after a busy day at work.

제안: 回答结构较好，但存在语法错误，如“made seem”应为“made it seem”。建议使用更准确的表达，并适当增加连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: Actually, I learned how to sing properly when I was in senior high school. At that time, I joined the school choir and learned to use my diaphragm to control my breath, which made singing much easier and more enjoyable for me.

제안: 回答中出现了词汇错误，如“goods”应为“good”，代词混用“him”应为“her”。建议注意代词和词汇的正确使用，并使表达更自然。

예시: Personally, I want to sing for my mom because she is a very special person to me. When I was a child, she taught me many important things. I would like to sing for her as a gift to show my gratitude and love.

제안: 回答中多处用词错误，如“seeing”应为“singing”，“from a perspective”表达不自然。建议简化句子结构，使用准确词汇，并提供具体例子。

예시: Of course, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Music is an important part of human culture and can help people from different backgrounds feel relaxed and joyful. For example, when I sing, I always feel energetic and happy.

× Yes, I really enjoy seeing this is of course from my perspective, music is a general language in human civilization that connects humans from different cultural, so it offers me a possibility to relax myself after business.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing. This is, of course, from my perspective. Music is a general language in human civilization that connects humans from different cultures, so it offers me a possibility to relax myself after business.

这里的动词应该是“singing”而不是“seeing”，因为“enjoy”后面需要跟动名词形式。

× music is a general language in human civilization that connects humans from different cultural, so it offers me a possibility to relax myself after business.

✓ music is a general language in human civilization that connects humans from different cultures, so it offers me a possibility to relax myself after business.

“cultural”是形容词，应该用其名词复数形式“cultures”来表示不同的文化。

× Actually, I learned how to sing correctly when I was in Senior High School.

✓ Actually, I learned how to sing correctly when I was in senior high school.

“Senior High School”不需要大写，除非是特指某个学校名称。这里是泛指，应小写。

× At that time, I participated in the school choir and acquired how to sing using my diaphragm, which helps me control my own breath and sing easily.

✓ At that time, I participated in the school choir and learned how to sing using my diaphragm, which helps me control my own breath and sing easily.

“acquire”后面不接“how to do”，应使用“learn”表示学习某技能。

× This experience made seem much easier and more enjoyable for me.

✓ This experience made singing seem much easier and more enjoyable for me.

句子缺少宾语，应该明确“made”后面宾语是“singing”，否则句子不完整。

× Personally, I want to sing for my mom because she is a very unique and special person for my goods.

✓ Personally, I want to sing for my mom because she is a very unique and special person to me.

“for my goods”用词错误，应为“to me”表示对我来说。

× So I do really want to sing for him as present to show my gratitude and love.

✓ So I really want to sing for her as a present to show my gratitude and love.

前文提到的是“my mom”，应使用“her”而非“him”；“as present”缺少冠词，应为“as a present”。

× Of course, I suppose seeing is able to bring happiness to people from a perspective, singing or music is a typical symbol of human culture, which can bring something relaxing and happy to people from different culture.

✓ Of course, I suppose singing is able to bring happiness to people. From a perspective, singing or music is a typical symbol of human culture, which can bring something relaxing and happy to people from different cultures.

“seeing”应为“singing”，因为上下文讨论的是唱歌；“different culture”应为复数“different cultures”。

× For example, when I seen, I always feel active.

✓ For example, when I sing, I always feel active.

“seen”是过去分词，句中应使用动词原形“sing”表示动作。