Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating the word 'singing' and try to use linking words to improve flow. Also, try to provide a bit more explanation to enrich your answer.

예시: Honestly, I'm not very fond of singing because my voice tends to be too loud and not very pleasant. Therefore, I usually avoid singing in public.

제안: Your answer is a bit long and repetitive. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'learn to learn to sing'. Use linking words to connect ideas and make your answer more coherent. Also, correct grammar mistakes and use simpler expressions for clarity.

예시: Honestly, I have never formally learned to sing because I usually sing only in the bathroom. Moreover, my voice is quite loud and not very melodious, which makes me uncomfortable to take singing lessons. However, I admire those who do learn to sing.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words for better flow. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about why you want to sing for your mother.

예시: There are many people I would like to sing for, but especially my mother because I love her deeply. She has always cared for me, so whenever I get a chance, I would love to sing for her to show my appreciation.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many repetitions and grammar errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid redundancy and be specific about how singing brings happiness.

예시: Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people because it is a way to express love and gratitude. When we sing for someone, it often makes them feel appreciated and joyful.

× Honestly speaking, I'm not a huge fan of singing as my vocals are too loud for singing so I don't prefer to sing.

✓ Honestly speaking, I'm not a huge fan of singing as my vocals are too loud, so I don't prefer to sing.

The original sentence has a run-on structure without proper punctuation. Adding a comma before 'so' separates the clauses correctly, improving clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Honestly speaking, in my entire life I haven't learned about singing much because I I think I am a bathroom singer and apart from this, my vocals are too loud and are not melodious which makes me feel uncomfortable to learn about singing.

✓ Honestly speaking, in my entire life I haven't learned much about singing because I think I am a bathroom singer, and apart from this, my vocals are too loud and not melodious, which makes me feel uncomfortable learning about singing.

The phrase 'uncomfortable to learn about singing' is incorrect; it should be 'uncomfortable learning about singing' to use the gerund form after 'uncomfortable'. Also, removing the repeated 'I' and adding commas improves sentence flow and correctness.

× However, I appreciate the people those who learn to learn to sing.

✓ However, I appreciate the people who learn to sing.

The phrase 'the people those who' is incorrect; 'those who' or simply 'who' should be used. Also, 'learn to learn to sing' is redundant; it should be 'learn to sing'.

× Well, there are a lot of people with whom I want to sing but definitely I will sing for my mother because I love her very much.

✓ Well, there are a lot of people with whom I want to sing, but definitely I will sing to my mother because I love her very much.

The verb 'sing' is usually followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating the person for whom one sings, not 'for'. Adding a comma before 'but' also improves sentence structure.

× Beside this she is the only one which cares me a lot.

✓ Besides this, she is the only one who cares for me a lot.

'Beside' should be 'Besides' to mean 'in addition'. 'Which' is used for things, 'who' is used for people. Also, 'cares me' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'cares for me'.

× So I will definitely whenever I get a chance I would sing for her.

✓ So I will definitely sing for her whenever I get a chance.

The sentence has mixed future tense forms 'will' and 'would' incorrectly. Using 'will' consistently and placing the time clause 'whenever I get a chance' at the end improves clarity and correctness.

× Well definitely singer singing is a part of a token of love and it it has people to bring happiness on their face as whenever we sing for anyone it it is it shows them a sense of gratitude and affection towards other people.

✓ Well, definitely singing is a token of love and it brings happiness to people's faces, as whenever we sing for anyone, it shows them a sense of gratitude and affection towards others.

The original sentence has redundant words ('singer singing', 'it it is it'), incorrect phrases ('has people to bring happiness on their face'), and awkward structure. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.