Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Следует избегать грамматических ошибок и избыточности, а также использовать связующие слова для логичности. Например, можно сказать: "Yes, I really enjoy singing because it is a fantastic way to relax and express emotions. I like singing alone or with friends during karaoke, which makes the experience even more enjoyable. Moreover, it helps me connect with other people."

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it is a fantastic way to relax and express emotions. I like singing alone or with friends during karaoke, which makes the experience even more enjoyable. Moreover, it helps me connect with other people.

제안: Ответ должен быть более связным и точным. Следует использовать связующие слова и избегать повторов. Например: "Yes, I learned singing when I was in kindergarten. My teacher taught me to sing opera. Although I don't practice it now, I would like to try again."

예시: Yes, I learned singing when I was in kindergarten. My teacher taught me to sing opera. Although I don't practice it now, I would like to try again.

제안: Ответ содержит повторения и некоторые грамматические ошибки. Следует использовать связующие слова и более чётко выражать мысли. Например: "I aspire to sing for a public audience because it helps me build confidence and overcome stage fright. Although performing in front of a crowd is challenging, it motivates me to improve my stage presence and connect better with listeners. For example, I feel more comfortable and enjoy sharing my passion with others."

예시: I aspire to sing for a public audience because it helps me build confidence and overcome stage fright. Although performing in front of a crowd is challenging, it motivates me to improve my stage presence and connect better with listeners. For example, I feel more comfortable and enjoy sharing my passion with others.

제안: Ответ должен быть более грамматически правильным и связным. Следует использовать подходящие связующие слова и избегать ошибок. Например: "Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them release their feelings and relieve stress. Moreover, singing together creates a sense of community and belonging. For example, karaoke is popular because it brings joy to many people."

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them release their feelings and relieve stress. Moreover, singing together creates a sense of community and belonging. For example, karaoke is popular because it brings joy to many people.

× Yes, I really enjoy singing because it is fantastic way to relax, stress and express emotions and I think alone or with my friends during karaoke which makes experience even more enjoyable.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it is a fantastic way to relax, relieve stress and express emotions, and I think singing alone or with my friends during karaoke makes the experience even more enjoyable.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'a' before 'fantastic way' which is necessary because 'way' is a singular countable noun. Also, 'stress' should be preceded by 'relieve' to make sense. Additionally, 'makes experience' needs 'the' before 'experience' to specify it. The sentence also needed slight restructuring for clarity.

× And from my perspective it is a way to connect with other peoples.

✓ And from my perspective, it is a way to connect with other people.

The word 'peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the correct plural form when referring to persons in general. 'Peoples' refers to distinct ethnic groups, which is not the intended meaning.

× Yes, I studied singing and it was in kindergarten.

✓ Yes, I studied singing when I was in kindergarten.

The phrase 'it was in kindergarten' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'when I was in kindergarten' to indicate the time period in the past.

× Then my teacher taught me to sing an opera.

✓ Then my teacher taught me to sing opera.

The article 'an' before 'opera' is incorrect because 'opera' here refers to the art form, which is uncountable and does not require an article.

× However, I'm not doing it now but would like to try in the present time.

✓ However, I'm not doing it now but would like to try it at the present time.

The modal verb phrase 'would like to try' requires an object 'it' to specify what is being tried. Also, 'in the present time' is better expressed as 'at the present time'.

× Performing in front of a crowd is a struggling experience which motivated me to improve my stage presence and connect better with listeners.

✓ Performing in front of a crowd is a challenging experience which motivates me to improve my stage presence and connect better with listeners.

The word 'struggling' is incorrectly used as an adjective here; the correct adjective is 'challenging'. Also, 'motivated' should be 'motivates' to agree with the present tense context.

× And for example, I feel I feel more comfortable and enjoy sharing my passion with other.

✓ For example, I feel more comfortable and enjoy sharing my passion with others.

The phrase 'I feel I feel' is a repetition error. Also, 'other' should be 'others' to refer to other people.

× It releases in their feelings which can make people feel happier and it is a great way to express emotions and relieve stress.

✓ It releases their feelings which can make people feel happier, and it is a great way to express emotions and relieve stress.

The preposition 'in' after 'releases' is incorrect; 'releases their feelings' is the correct form. Also, a comma is added for clarity.

× Like karaoke are popular because they bring joy to many.

✓ Like karaoke, it is popular because it brings joy to many.

'Karaoke' is singular and uncountable here, so 'are' should be 'is'. Also, 'they' should be 'it' to agree with 'karaoke'. A comma is added after 'Like karaoke' for clarity.