Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit long and lacks clear structure. Try to make your sentences shorter and more coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. For example, say: "Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax during my free time. I often play my guitar and sing songs, which calms my mind and relieves stress."

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax during my free time. I often play my guitar and sing songs, which calms my mind and relieves stress.

제안: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using clearer sentence structure and linking words. Also, avoid vague phrases like "stable option". Instead, explain what you mean. For example: "Yes, I learned singing from a YouTube channel called Mitra Singh Music. It helped me understand musical notes, which I previously found difficult. Now, I feel more confident in my singing."

예시: Yes, I learned singing from a YouTube channel called Mitra Singh Music. It helped me understand musical notes, which I previously found difficult. Now, I feel more confident in my singing.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and repetition. Try to use correct tenses and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to make your answer smoother. For example: "To be honest, I like to sing for myself whenever I feel stressed. Playing my guitar and singing makes me calm and happy, helping me forget my worries."

예시: To be honest, I like to sing for myself whenever I feel stressed. Playing my guitar and singing makes me calm and happy, helping me forget my worries.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more varied vocabulary and clearer linking words. Also, avoid mixing pronouns like "them" and "our". For example: "Yes, singing can make people feel calm and happy because it helps relax the mind and reduce stress. Moreover, it keeps them positive and motivated to move forward."

예시: Yes, singing can make people feel calm and happy because it helps relax the mind and reduce stress. Moreover, it keeps them positive and motivated to move forward.

× Yes, I like singing because singing gives me an enjoyable moment when I get some free time I like to relax my mind, stay calm with my own job and I took my guitar and sang a nice song that helps me to keep my.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it gives me an enjoyable moment when I get some free time. I like to relax my mind, stay calm with my own job, and I take my guitar and sing a nice song that helps me to keep calm.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, making it confusing. Breaking it into shorter sentences and correcting verb tenses improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I took my guitar and sang a nice song that helps me to keep my.

✓ I take my guitar and sing a nice song that helps me to keep calm.

The use of past tense 'took' and 'sang' is inconsistent with the present habitual action described. Changing to present tense 'take' and 'sing' aligns with the context of regular activity.

× Yes, I learned singing from a YouTube channel, it's known by Mitra Singh music.

✓ Yes, I learned singing from a YouTube channel called Mitra Singh Music.

The phrase 'it's known by' is incorrect; 'called' is the proper way to name the channel. Also, 'learned' is acceptable here as past tense since learning happened in the past.

× It helps me to understand the notes which I find really difficult for me.

✓ It helps me understand the notes which I find really difficult.

The phrase 'difficult for me' is redundant after 'I find'. Also, 'helps me to understand' can be simplified to 'helps me understand' for natural English usage.

× But I have a stable option now.

✓ But now I have a stable option.

Reordering the sentence improves natural flow and clarity.

× To be honest, I like to sing for myself whenever I get over some stress.

✓ To be honest, I like to sing for myself whenever I am stressed.

The phrase 'get over some stress' is awkward; 'am stressed' is a clearer and more natural expression.

× I took my guitar and it make me calm and happy.

✓ I take my guitar and it makes me calm and happy.

The verbs should be in present tense to describe habitual actions. Also, 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× I forgot about all the stress so I'll sing only for myself.

✓ I forget about all the stress, so I sing only for myself.

The sentence mixes past and future tenses inconsistently. Using present tense maintains consistency with habitual action.

× It helps them to relax their mind and get rid of our stress.

✓ It helps them relax their minds and get rid of their stress.

The pronouns 'their' should be used consistently to refer to 'them' instead of switching to 'our'.

× It keeps them positive and help them to go forward.

✓ It keeps them positive and helps them to move forward.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'It'. Also, 'move forward' is a more natural phrase than 'go forward' in this context.