Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use clearer expressions. For example, instead of 'helps me to keep better feel and peaceful', say 'helps me feel peaceful and relaxed'. Also, use linking words like 'because' and 'and' effectively to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel peaceful and relaxed. When I am with friends, we often sing together, which is a fun way to enjoy our free time.

제안: Your answer needs clearer structure and more natural phrasing. Start with a direct response, then add details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like 'there was a time when I was learning singing'. Instead, say 'I took singing classes at school when I was a child'. Also, use 'I don't have time to learn singing now' instead of 'I do not have time to learn or singing'.

예시: Yes, I took singing classes at school when I was a child. However, I don't have time to learn singing now because of my busy schedule.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details. For example, say 'I would like to sing for my mother because she loves traditional songs'. Avoid double negatives like 'that's not none other'. Also, clarify 'in a traditional' to 'traditional style'.

예시: I would like to sing for my mother because she loves traditional songs. Singing traditional songs in front of her makes me happy.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and natural. Use linking words properly and avoid awkward phrases like 'helps to people feel like peaceful'. Instead, say 'helps people feel peaceful and calm'. Also, avoid repeating the same idea unnecessarily. Try to combine sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, singing can bring happiness because it is an enjoyable activity people can do in their free time. Moreover, it helps people feel peaceful and calm.

× Yes, I like singing because it helps me to keep better feel and peaceful.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it helps me to feel better and peaceful.

The phrase 'keep better feel' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'feel better' because 'feel' is a verb here and 'better' is an adverb modifying it. Also, 'peaceful' is an adjective describing the state, so 'feel peaceful' is correct.

× So that's why when we are in groups we often sing songs and moreover, it's also a fun activity and we can enjoy our free time.

✓ So that's why when we are in groups, we often sing songs; moreover, it's also a fun activity and we can enjoy our free time.

A comma is needed after 'groups' to separate clauses properly. Also, a semicolon or period is better before 'moreover' to connect independent clauses correctly. This improves sentence clarity and grammar.

× Well, if I remember there were singing classes in our school when I was a child that there was a time when I was learning singing.

✓ Well, if I remember correctly, there were singing classes in our school when I was a child, and there was a time when I was learning to sing.

The phrase 'learning singing' is incorrect; the verb 'learn' should be followed by the infinitive form 'to sing'. Also, adding 'correctly' after 'if I remember' improves clarity. The sentence structure is improved by adding 'and' to connect ideas.

× But nowadays according to my busy schedule, I do not have time to learn or singing.

✓ But nowadays, according to my busy schedule, I do not have time to learn singing or to sing.

The phrase 'to learn or singing' is incorrect because 'learn' should be followed by the infinitive form. Also, 'to learn singing' or 'to learn to sing' are correct forms. Adding commas improves readability.

× Well, if I talk about to sing a song for anybody, that's not none other my mother because she also loves singing.

✓ Well, if I talk about singing a song for anybody, it's none other than my mother because she also loves singing.

The phrase 'talk about to sing' is incorrect; 'talk about' should be followed by the gerund 'singing'. Also, 'that's not none other my mother' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'it's none other than my mother'. These corrections fix preposition and pronoun usage.

× Moreover, she loves the traditional singing.

✓ Moreover, she loves traditional singing.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'traditional singing' because it refers to a general activity, not a specific one. Removing 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× That's why I like to sing a song in front of her in a traditional.

✓ That's why I like to sing a song in front of her in a traditional style.

The phrase 'in a traditional' is incomplete; it needs a noun like 'style' to complete the meaning. Adding 'style' clarifies the sentence.

× Yes, of course singing can bring happiness to people because it's a type of activity where the people can do in a free time.

✓ Yes, of course singing can bring happiness to people because it's a type of activity that people can do in their free time.

The phrase 'the people' is incorrect here; 'people' without 'the' is appropriate. Also, 'in a free time' should be 'in their free time' to indicate possession. These corrections fix quantifier and article usage.

× Moreover, it helps to people feel like peaceful and very calm.

✓ Moreover, it helps people feel peaceful and very calm.

The phrase 'helps to people feel' is incorrect; 'help' is followed directly by the object and base verb without 'to'. Also, 'feel like peaceful' is incorrect; 'feel peaceful' is correct. These corrections fix preposition and adjective usage.

× So that's why I think singing and bring happiness to people.

✓ So that's why I think singing brings happiness to people.

The phrase 'singing and bring' is incorrect; the verb should agree with the singular subject 'singing'. Using 'brings' corrects the subject-verb agreement and sentence structure.