Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions. For instance, I often sing in front of my family and friends, which helps me feel more relaxed and connected to them.

제안: Avoid repeating phrases and try to structure your answer clearly. Begin with a direct response, then explain your feelings with specific reasons. Use linking words to improve flow.

예시: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I prefer listening to music. Also, I feel shy about singing in front of others, which makes me hesitant to learn formally.

제안: Try to avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: I would like to sing for my friends because we are very close. Singing together helps us bond, and they also give me honest feedback to improve.

제안: Focus on clear and complete sentences. Start with a direct answer, then explain your opinion with specific examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because music is like food for the soul. For example, whenever I feel sad, listening to music helps me feel better and more cheerful.

× I like to pass it.

✓ I like to practise it.

The phrase 'I like to pass it' is unclear and likely a misuse of the verb 'pass'. The intended meaning seems to be 'practise' or 'perform' singing. Using 'practise' fits the context better and corrects the verb usage.

× I like.

✓ I like singing.

The sentence 'I like.' is incomplete and lacks an object. It should be 'I like singing.' to complete the thought and make the sentence grammatically correct.

× Singing is a way to express your emotions with others and it is also a relief.

✓ Singing is a way to express your emotions to others and it is also a relief.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to indicate expressing emotions directed at others is 'to'.

× No, I haven't learned any regular classes because I I enjoy listening to music rather than singing because I feel shy as I feel shy to feel singing.

✓ No, I haven't taken any regular classes because I enjoy listening to music rather than singing since I feel shy about singing.

The phrase 'haven't learned any regular classes' is incorrect; 'haven't taken any regular classes' is appropriate. Also, 'feel shy to feel singing' is incorrect; it should be 'feel shy about singing'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.

× I want to sing for my friends because they are very close to me and when we get together we we, This is the because this is the way to this is the way of bonding.

✓ I want to sing for my friends because they are very close to me and when we get together, this is a way of bonding.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. It is corrected to a clear, complete sentence with proper structure and removal of repeated words.

× And they give me an honest review.

✓ They give me honest reviews.

The plural noun 'friends' requires the plural noun 'reviews' to agree in number. Also, 'an honest review' implies a single review, but generally, multiple reviews are given over time.

× Yes, I think it's Indian can bring happiness to the people because when we when someone says is is music is a diet of soul and it's right Whenever I am sad, I feel I listen music and I feel less and.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because, as someone says, music is the diet of the soul and it's true. Whenever I am sad, I listen to music and I feel better.

The original sentence contains multiple errors: 'it's Indian' is incorrect and replaced with 'singing'; 'when we when someone says is is music is a diet of soul' is corrected for clarity and grammar; 'listen music' requires the preposition 'to'; 'I feel less and' is incomplete and corrected to 'I feel better' to convey the intended meaning.