Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. For example, say "music motivates me to do things and fills me with energy." Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because music motivates me and fills me with energy.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Use proper sentence structure and clarify your point. For example, say "Unfortunately, I haven't had the opportunity to learn singing because in my country, there are restrictions on girls singing." Avoid repeating phrases and incomplete sentences.

예시: Unfortunately, I haven't had the chance to learn singing because in my country, there are restrictions on girls singing.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains redundant phrases. Try to answer directly and clearly. For example, say "I usually sing alone in the bathroom while showering because I don't have anyone to sing for." Keep your sentences concise and avoid unnecessary repetition.

예시: I usually sing alone in the bathroom while showering because I don't have anyone to sing for.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to express your opinion clearly with correct grammar. For example, say "I think singing can bring happiness, but it depends on the type of music. Sometimes, sad music can make people feel worse." Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I think singing can bring happiness, but it depends on the type of music. Sometimes, sad music can make people feel worse.

× I really enjoy singing because music can be motivate me about doing something and make my energy fully.

✓ I really enjoy singing because music can motivate me to do something and make my energy full.

The modal verb 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'motivate', not 'be motivate'. Also, 'about doing something' is incorrect; it should be 'to do something'. 'Make my energy fully' is incorrect; the adjective 'full' should be used instead of the adverb 'fully'.

× Unfortunately I haven't any opportunity to learn singing learn singing because my country we have an impediment rules to girls singing and.

✓ Unfortunately, I haven't had any opportunity to learn singing because in my country we have restrictive rules for girls singing.

The present perfect negative 'haven't' requires a past participle verb; 'haven't any opportunity' is incorrect, it should be 'haven't had any opportunity'. The phrase 'learn singing learn singing' is repetitive and incorrect. 'Impediment rules to girls singing' is awkward; 'restrictive rules for girls singing' is clearer and grammatically correct. Also, a comma is needed after 'Unfortunately'.

× It's such a shame. Nobody. I'm sleeping in the bathroom and when I was showering, when I was getting shower and I'm singing for myself and nobody, unfortunately I can't hear that. It's miserable.

✓ It's such a shame. Nobody. I sleep in the bathroom and when I am showering, I sing to myself, but nobody, unfortunately, can hear me. It's miserable.

The present continuous 'I'm sleeping' is incorrect here; the simple present 'I sleep' is appropriate for habitual actions. 'When I was showering' is correct, but 'when I was getting shower' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am showering'. 'I'm singing for myself' should be 'I sing to myself'. 'I can't hear that' is incorrect; it should be 'nobody can hear me'. Also, commas are needed for clarity.

× It depends on the music types and because when you are sad and listening to the deep musical voice and instrument, it's more impact bad impacts on yourself.

✓ It depends on the type of music because when you are sad and listen to deep musical voices and instruments, it has more negative impacts on you.

'Music types' should be 'type of music' for correct noun phrase. 'And because' is redundant; 'because' alone suffices. 'Listening to the deep musical voice and instrument' should be 'listen to deep musical voices and instruments' for parallel structure and plural forms. 'It's more impact bad impacts' is incorrect; it should be 'it has more negative impacts'. 'On yourself' is better expressed as 'on you' for clarity.