Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然で効果的ですが、'feel feel'の繰り返しや文法の小さな誤りを修正し、より流暢に話す練習をしましょう。また、接続詞を使って文のつながりを明確にすると良いです。

예시: I don't really enjoy singing alone because I'm not very confident in my singing ability. However, I love singing in groups because it's much more exciting and helps me feel connected with others. For example, when I sing with my friends, it creates a fun and supportive atmosphere, which makes the experience really enjoyable.

제안: 仮定法過去完了の使い方に誤りがあります。正しい文法を学び、より自然な表現を心がけましょう。また、'much more better'は冗長なので避けてください。

예시: No, I haven't, but I wish I had learned how to sing when I was a kid. I think if I had learned, I would be much better at singing now.

제안: 文法の誤り（'was'→'were'、'more happier'は誤用）を直し、接続詞を使って文の流れをスムーズにしましょう。具体的な例を加えるとさらに良いです。

예시: I would like to sing for people who are feeling sad because I believe songs have a strong power to make people happy. Singing for them could help lift their spirits and make them feel more relaxed.

제안: 'People, people'の繰り返しは避け、文法的に正しい単数・複数形を使いましょう。また、接続詞を使って理由を明確に述べると良いです。

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness. Both singing and listening to music make people happier because the lyrics are fascinating and the melody helps people relax.

× it creates very fun and supportive atmosphere that makes the experience really enjoyable.

✓ it creates a very fun and supportive atmosphere that makes the experience really enjoyable.

In English, singular countable nouns like 'atmosphere' require an article. Here, 'a' is needed before 'very fun and supportive atmosphere' to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× I hope I had before when I was a kid.

✓ I wish I had learned before when I was a kid.

The phrase 'I hope I had before' is incorrect because 'hope' is used for present or future desires, not past regrets. 'I wish I had learned' correctly expresses a past regret or unreal past condition.

× I could be much more better in singing.

✓ I could be much better at singing.

The phrase 'more better' is redundant because 'better' is already a comparative adjective. Also, the correct preposition with 'better' in this context is 'at' rather than 'in'.

× I would like to sing for some people who have sad feelings.

✓ I would like to sing for some people who are feeling sad.

The phrase 'people who have sad feelings' is awkward. Using 'people who are feeling sad' is more natural and grammatically correct to describe people experiencing sadness.

× I think songs have very strong power that makes people happy, makes me feel happy and relaxed.

✓ I think songs have a very strong power that makes people happy and makes me feel happy and relaxed.

The noun 'power' here is countable in this context and requires the article 'a' before 'very strong power' to be grammatically correct.

× So I wish I could sing for some people who was feeling bad and makes them feel more happier.

✓ So I wish I could sing for some people who were feeling bad and make them feel happier.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'people' which is plural, so the verb should be 'were' not 'was'. Also, 'makes' should be 'make' to agree with 'I' as the subject. 'More happier' is incorrect; 'happier' alone is sufficient.

× People, people.

✓ People.

Repeating 'People' twice is unnecessary and does not add meaning. It should be stated once for clarity.

× I think both singing and listening to music makes people happier because the lyrics are very fascinating and also the melody makes people relaxed.

✓ I think both singing and listening to music make people happier because the lyrics are very fascinating and also the melody makes people relaxed.

The subject 'both singing and listening to music' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes' to agree in number.