Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of saying 'I really enjoy singing, especially when I am driving and I am in a shower,' you could say 'I really enjoy singing, especially when I'm driving or taking a shower, because it helps me relax and improves my vocabulary.'

예시: I really enjoy singing, especially when I'm driving or taking a shower, because it helps me relax and improves my vocabulary.

제안: Focus on using correct grammar and avoid repetition. Also, try to give a clear and direct answer with supporting details. For example, you can say 'No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I usually sing casually for fun without any training.'

예시: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I usually sing casually for fun without any training.

제안: Your answer is good but you can improve coherence by using linking words and avoid repeating the same idea. For example, you can say 'I would love to sing for Justin Bieber because he is my favorite artist. Being his backup singer someday would be a dream come true and make my year.'

예시: I would love to sing for Justin Bieber because he is my favorite artist. Being his backup singer someday would be a dream come true and make my year.

제안: Try to use correct vocabulary and grammar. Instead of 'it brings opinions to people,' you could say 'it brings joy to people.' Also, use linking words to connect your examples clearly. For example, 'Yes, I believe singing brings joy to people. For instance, at weddings, people sing to express their happiness, and at clubs, people sing along loudly to show their enjoyment.'

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings joy to people. For instance, at weddings, people sing to express their happiness, and at clubs, people sing along loudly to show their enjoyment.

× I really enjoy singing, especially when I am driving and I am in a shower.

✓ I really enjoy singing, especially when I am driving and I am in the shower.

The phrase 'in a shower' is incorrect because 'shower' is a specific place and requires the definite article 'the'. Using 'the shower' specifies the particular shower you are in, which is grammatically correct.

× It calms me and I feel much relaxed when I am singing and I love that I get to learn new words and improve my vocabulary.

✓ It calms me and I feel much more relaxed when I am singing, and I love that I get to learn new words and improve my vocabulary.

The phrase 'feel much relaxed' is incorrect; the correct form is 'feel much more relaxed' to express a comparative degree of relaxation. Also, adding a comma before 'and I love' improves sentence clarity.

× I I have never went to school to learn how to sing.

✓ I have never gone to school to learn how to sing.

The verb 'went' is the simple past tense, but after 'have never' (present perfect), the past participle 'gone' should be used. Therefore, 'have never went' is incorrect; it should be 'have never gone'.

× Actually does it does.

✓ Actually, it does.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and redundant. The correct structure is 'Actually, it does.' which is a clear affirmative response.

× I believe it brings opinions to people.

✓ I believe it brings happiness to people.

The word 'opinions' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is that singing brings positive feelings or happiness, so 'happiness' is the appropriate noun here.

× At weddings people would be singing to show their that they are happy.

✓ At weddings, people would be singing to show that they are happy.

The phrase 'to show their that they are happy' is incorrect. The possessive pronoun 'their' is unnecessary and should be removed to correct the sentence.

× At the club people will be singing along the songs loud, showing an emotion of being happy.

✓ At the club, people will be singing along to the songs loudly, showing an emotion of being happy.

The phrase 'singing along the songs loud' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'singing along to the songs', and 'loud' should be the adverb 'loudly' to modify the verb 'singing'. Also, adding commas improves readability.