Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer should be more natural and clear. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and try to express your feelings more precisely. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions, especially when I feel happy or free. When I was a child at school, I used to sing sometimes with my classmates, which was always enjoyable.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to make it logical and easy to follow.

예시: Yes, I learned to sing a few years ago at school with my classmates. Nowadays, I enjoy singing to relax, especially when I am with my favorite people in my family.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and by linking your ideas more smoothly.

예시: I like to sing for my favorite people, such as my mother, father, sister, husband, and friends, because singing makes me feel happy and relaxed.

제안: Your answer is good but could be more natural by using simpler expressions and linking your ideas more effectively.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people express their feelings and connects them with others.

× I like singing when I am happy, when I am freedom, when I feel freedom, freedom.

✓ I like singing when I am happy, when I am free, when I feel freedom.

The word 'freedom' is a noun, but the sentence requires an adjective to describe the state of the subject. The correct adjective form is 'free'. Using 'freedom' here is incorrect because it does not grammatically fit as a predicate adjective.

× And when I was child at school, sometimes we have some, some.

✓ And when I was a child at school, sometimes we had some, some.

The phrase 'I was child' is missing the article 'a' before the singular noun 'child'. Also, 'we have' should be in past tense 'we had' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was a child'.

× Ohh Toby Honest, it was only some years ago at school when me and my classmates I was singing some songs and today I'm just trying relax with things with my favorite people in my family.

✓ Ohh Toby Honest, it was only some years ago at school when my classmates and I were singing some songs, and today I'm just trying to relax with my favorite people in my family.

The pronoun 'me' should be 'I' when used as the subject of a clause. Also, 'I was singing' should be 'we were singing' to agree with the plural subject 'my classmates and I'. The phrase 'trying relax' is missing the preposition 'to' before the verb 'relax'. The phrase 'with things with my favorite people' is unclear and corrected to 'with my favorite people' for clarity.

× It will be only my favorite people, but umm, for example, my mother, father, sister, husband and my friends.

✓ It will be only my favorite people, for example, my mother, father, sister, husband, and my friends.

The sentence is mostly correct, but the conjunction 'but' is unnecessary and disrupts the flow. Removing 'but' improves clarity and correctness.

× Umm because I am happy and I'm honest.

✓ Umm because I am happy and honest.

The pronoun 'I'm' before 'honest' is redundant because 'I am' already applies to both adjectives 'happy' and 'honest'. Combining them without repeating the pronoun is more natural and grammatically correct.