Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words to improve coherence. Avoid filler phrases and repetition to sound more natural and effective.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and unwind. For instance, I often sing in the bathroom when I'm free, as it calms my mind and lifts my mood.

제안: Focus on clarity and correct word choice. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'computations' which seems incorrect here. Provide specific details about your experience to enrich your answer.

예시: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, during my school days, I participated in several singing competitions because it was my hobby. I also improved by watching singing videos online.

제안: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid hesitation or repetition. Use linking words to connect your thoughts. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: I usually don't sing for others, but if I could sing well, I would like to sing a song for my mother because she enjoys singing too, especially in the bathroom.

제안: Improve your grammar and sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Provide specific examples and explain them clearly to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because listening to songs helps people relax and enjoy themselves. For example, live music bands in restaurants or pubs create a pleasant atmosphere that lifts people's moods.

× I know I never ever learned how to sing but but yes, in my school time I participated in so many computations even though I didn't want any computation.

✓ I know I have never ever learnt how to sing but yes, in my school time I participated in so many competitions even though I didn't want any competition.

The verb 'learned' should be in the present perfect form 'have learnt' to indicate an experience up to now. Also, 'computations' is incorrect; the correct word is 'competitions'.

× For example when we go in a restaurant or in a pub there are music band because it it reflects the mood of peoples really well so I think.

✓ For example, when we go to a restaurant or a pub, there is a music band because it reflects the mood of people really well, so I think.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'to' is used to indicate movement towards a place. Also, 'music band' should be 'a music band' and 'peoples' should be 'people'.

× I just you can say I'm a bathroom singer.

✓ I just, you can say, I'm a bathroom singer.

This sentence is fragmented and unclear; adding commas improves clarity. No plural issue here, so no correction needed for singular/plural.

× But yes, I have a wish if if I could sing a song properly, then I I would I would sing a song for my mother on her, but they because she is like singing and she is.

✓ But yes, I have a wish that if I could sing a song properly, then I would sing a song for my mother because she likes singing and she is quite a bathroom singer as well.

The pronouns and sentence structure were incorrect and unclear. 'On her, but they' is incorrect; it should be 'because she likes singing'. Also, 'quiet' should be 'quite'.

× Yes, of course singing a can bring happiness to people because when people are listened songs they just feeling relaxed and they enjoying.

✓ Yes, of course singing can bring happiness to people because when people listen to songs they just feel relaxed and enjoy.

The verb forms were incorrect: 'are listened' should be 'listen to', 'feeling' should be 'feel', and 'they enjoying' should be 'they enjoy'. Present simple tense is appropriate here.