Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有些语法和表达上的错误，导致意思不够清晰。建议你用简单明了的句子直接表达观点，并避免重复和冗长。比如先明确说不喜欢唱歌，然后说明原因，保持句子简洁。

예시: No, I don't like singing because I find it hard to remember the lyrics and sing in the correct key. It is quite challenging for me.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清的问题，建议用更准确的句子结构表达经历和感受，同时避免重复和不连贯。可以先说明学过唱歌，然后说明遇到的困难和原因。

예시: Yes, I learned to sing during my school years. However, it was challenging because the teacher rarely focused on my progress, so I didn't find it very interesting.

제안: 回答表达不清，句子结构混乱。建议先明确说想为谁唱歌，然后说明原因和计划。使用简单连贯的句子，避免口语填充词。

예시: I want to sing a song by Lana Del Rey for a girl I like because it is her favorite song. I plan to practice it this Sunday to surprise her.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议用更清晰的句子表达观点，并用具体例子支持。避免重复“to people”，保持句子流畅。

예시: Of course, singing can bring happiness to people. When I feel upset, I listen to music on my phone quietly, and it helps me feel more relaxed.

× Well, not pretty much.

✓ Well, not really.

The phrase 'not pretty much' is incorrect because 'pretty much' is an informal quantifier meaning 'almost' or 'nearly'. It does not fit with 'not' in this context. The correct expression is 'not really' to express a negative preference.

× I can't really find the correct key of pretty much an lyric of the song is really difficult to do.

✓ I can't really find the correct key, and singing almost any lyric of the song is really difficult to do.

The phrase 'pretty much an lyric' is incorrect; 'an' should be 'a' before consonant sounds, and 'pretty much' needs to be placed properly. Also, the sentence structure is unclear. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects article usage.

× To remember so I'm saying is quite challenging for me.

✓ Remembering and singing is quite challenging for me.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'To remember so I'm saying' is not a proper phrase. The correction uses gerunds to express the activities clearly.

× I don't really like this.

✓ I don't really like it.

The pronoun 'this' is less appropriate here; 'it' refers better to the activity of singing mentioned before.

× Well yes, I have learned how to sing a song in my school year.

✓ Well yes, I learned how to sing a song during my school years.

The phrase 'have learned' is acceptable but 'learned' simple past fits better with the specific past time 'in my school year'. Also, 'school year' should be plural 'school years' if referring to multiple years.

× But it is quite challenging for me and in a in a hole. In a whole Class A.

✓ But it was quite challenging for me, and in the whole Class A, the teacher seldom focused on my progress.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'in a in a hole' is a typo for 'in a whole'. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× The teacher is seldomly a focused on my progress, so I find it not that interesting.

✓ The teacher seldom focused on my progress, so I found it not that interesting.

The adverb 'seldomly' is incorrect; 'seldom' is the correct form. Also, 'a focused' is incorrect; it should be 'focused'. The tense is adjusted to past to match the context.

× Well, I want to say, uh, the diamond you Lana Del Rey for a girl I like in this sun is is her favorite song.

✓ Well, I want to sing 'Diamonds' by Lana Del Rey for a girl I like because this song is her favorite.

The original sentence has pronoun and word choice errors: 'the diamond you' is incorrect; the song title is 'Diamonds'. 'in this sun' is likely 'this song'. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun and article usage.

× So I want to give her a surprise to practice this Sunday.

✓ So I want to surprise her by practicing this Sunday.

The phrase 'give her a surprise to practice' is incorrect. The correction uses 'surprise her by practicing' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Of course, yes thing can definitely bring happiness to people to people and I feel upset I always open the music app of my.

✓ Of course, yes, singing can definitely bring happiness to people. When I feel upset, I always open the music app on my phone.

'yes thing' should be 'yes, singing'. The phrase 'music app of my' is incomplete; it should be 'music app on my phone'. The sentence is split for clarity.

× And pick up my cell phone and listen to them quietly and I feel like more relaxed than before.

✓ I pick up my cell phone and listen to songs quietly, and I feel more relaxed than before.

The original sentence lacks a subject for 'pick up' and 'listen'. 'Them' is vague; 'songs' is clearer. The correction improves sentence structure and clarity.

× So bring happiness to people, definitely.

✓ So singing definitely brings happiness to people.

The original sentence is a fragment. The correction forms a complete sentence with subject and verb.