Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 중복 표현이 있습니다. 또한, 문장이 명확하지 않고 연결어 사용이 부적절합니다. 좀 더 간결하고 명확하게 자신의 생각을 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing alone because it helps me relax and express my feelings. However, I feel shy to sing with others since I'm not confident in my singing skills.

제안: 문법 오류가 많고 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 또한, 내용이 중복되고 구체성이 부족합니다. 과거 경험을 이야기할 때는 시제 일치와 명확한 문장 구성이 필요합니다.

예시: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in elementary school. I joined the church choir, which was a great experience because I sang with my friends and learned proper singing techniques.

제안: 답변이 비교적 명확하지만 문장 연결이 부자연스럽고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하고, 이유를 좀 더 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: I like to sing for my parents because they worked hard to raise me. Singing for them is my way of showing respect and making them happy.

제안: 문장이 단편적이고 연결어 사용이 부족하여 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적으로 답변을 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: Of course, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. It is an essential way to express emotions and connect with others, which makes it a very important tool for emotional well-being.

× I'll I can stretch out my things with singing.

✓ I can stretch out my things with singing.

The phrase 'I'll I can' is incorrect because 'I'll' (I will) is unnecessary and causes confusion. The correct sentence should simply be 'I can stretch out my things with singing.' This removes redundancy and clarifies the meaning.

× But however, however, when I don't really like to speak singing with other peoples because I'm not good at singing.

✓ However, I don't really like to sing with other people because I'm not good at singing.

The phrase 'But however, however' is redundant; 'However' alone is sufficient. 'Speak singing' is incorrect; the verb should be 'sing.' 'Peoples' is incorrect plural form; the correct word is 'people.' The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper word usage.

× Yes, I learn about singing in When I was elementary school, I was in church choir.

✓ Yes, I learned about singing when I was in elementary school; I was in the church choir.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to match the past time reference. 'In When' is incorrect; 'when' alone is sufficient. Adding 'in the church choir' clarifies the sentence structure.

× And I learn how to sing.

✓ And I learned how to sing.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to match the past context.

× In church it was good memory when with my friends.

✓ In church, I had good memories with my friends.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'It was good memory when with my friends' is incorrect. The corrected sentence uses proper subject and verb agreement and clearer phrasing.

× And I learn how to sing correctly work.

✓ And I learned how to sing correctly.

The verb 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned.' The phrase 'correctly work' is incorrect and unnecessary; 'sing correctly' suffices.

× My mom and dad had a hard time to raise me up, so I want to respect them for my singing.

✓ My mom and dad had a hard time raising me, so I want to respect them through my singing.

The phrase 'had a hard time to raise me up' is incorrect; the correct form is 'had a hard time raising me.' 'Respect them for my singing' is awkward; 'respect them through my singing' is clearer.

× I think my singing will. Make them happy.

✓ I think my singing will make them happy.

The sentence is broken incorrectly by a period. It should be one continuous sentence.

× Sing is really. Essential for. People's emotion.

✓ Singing is really essential for people's emotions.

'Sing' as a noun is incorrect; the gerund 'Singing' should be used. The sentence is fragmented and should be combined. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match context.

× By singing. We can express our emotion or touch them by singing.

✓ By singing, we can express our emotions or touch others through singing.

The sentence is fragmented and needs to be combined. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions.' 'Touch them' is vague; 'touch others' is clearer. 'By singing' is repeated unnecessarily.

× It is very important tool for.

✓ It is a very important tool.

The sentence is incomplete and missing an article and object. 'For' is unnecessary here and should be removed.