Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中有语法错误和拼写错误，影响了表达的自然性和清晰度。建议你使用完整的句子，避免拼写错误，并且直接回答问题后，提供具体原因。

예시: Yes, I like singing very much because I am interested in music. My favorite singer is Jolly. Singing helps me relax and makes me feel energetic, so I really enjoy it.

제안: 回答不连贯，句子断断续续，表达不清晰。建议用完整句子表达经历，并说明原因，使用连接词使回答更流畅。

예시: Yes, I used to have singing lessons in junior high school and senior high school. However, I often sang off-key because I had difficulty controlling the tone.

제안: 回答不完整且语法错误较多。建议完整表达想为谁唱歌的原因，并用连接词使句子连贯。

예시: I definitely want to sing for my mom because she raised me and spent a lot of time taking care of me. I am very thankful to her, and I know many songs that I can sing to express my gratitude.

제안: 回答中有语法和表达错误，句子不连贯。建议用清晰的句子表达观点，使用连接词使内容连贯，并具体说明原因。

예시: Yes, of course. I enjoy singing myself, and I believe singing can have a powerful effect by making people feel energetic. Moreover, singing can help people relax, so it definitely brings happiness.

× Yes, I like singing very much becauses I'll.

✓ Yes, I like singing very much because I do.

The word 'becauses' is a misspelling of 'because', and 'I'll' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'because I do' to express affirmation. Use 'because' to introduce a reason and 'I do' to affirm liking singing.

× I'm interested in music and my favorite singer is jolly and music can relax me and makes me energetic so I love seeing.

✓ I'm interested in music and my favorite singer is Jolly. Music can relax me and make me energetic, so I love singing.

The sentence has run-on issues and incorrect verb forms. 'Makes' should be 'make' to agree with plural subject 'music' (treated as singular but here better as general). Also, 'seeing' is a typo for 'singing'. Splitting into sentences improves clarity.

× Yes, I used to have singing lessons. In junior high school and Senior High School. But. I sung. All four becaused. I'm not, I always. Not on the tone.

✓ Yes, I used to have singing lessons in junior high school and senior high school. But I sang poorly because I was not always on the tone.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain incorrect verb forms. 'Sung' is past participle; 'sang' is simple past. 'Becaused' is incorrect; use 'because'. The sentence needs to be combined for clarity.

× I definitely want to sing for my mom because my mom raised me up and she spend a lot of time on me so.

✓ I definitely want to sing for my mom because she raised me and spent a lot of time on me.

'Raised me up' is redundant; 'raised me' is sufficient. 'She spend' should be 'she spent' to match past tense. Also, 'on me' is acceptable but 'with me' might be better; however, 'on me' is acceptable here.

× I'm very thankful to my mom and I just know many songs for mom so I think I.

✓ I'm very thankful to my mom and I know many songs for her, so I think I will sing for her.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Just know' is awkward; 'I know many songs for her' is clearer. The sentence needs completion to express intention.

× Yes, of course, becaused myself is a person who enjoins source.

✓ Yes, of course, because I am a person who enjoys music.

'Becaused' is incorrect; use 'because'. 'Myself' is incorrectly used; 'I am' is correct. 'Enjoins source' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'enjoys music' or 'enjoys songs'.

× And I think singing can bring something. Powerful to make people energetic.

✓ And I think singing can bring something powerful that makes people energetic.

The period after 'something' is incorrect; 'powerful' should be connected to 'something' as an adjective. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular 'something'.

× What's more? Singing can relax people, so singing can bring happiness to people.

✓ What's more, singing can relax people, so singing can bring happiness to people.

'What's more?' is a question but used here as a transition; it should be 'What's more,' with a comma.