Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to give a clear and complete answer with correct sentence structure. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain why you like singing with specific reasons.

예시: Yes, I love singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. When I hear music, it lifts my mood and helps me forget my worries. Singing allows me to express my emotions and enjoy the moment.

제안: Provide a complete and clear response. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain your experience clearly. For example, mention that you have not taken formal lessons but learned by observing others during events.

예시: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, I learned by watching and listening to people around me during karaoke events. This helped me improve my singing skills gradually.

제안: Make sure to answer the question directly and clearly. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear ideas. Use linking words to explain your choice and describe the person you want to sing for.

예시: I want to sing for someone who has had a great impact on my life, such as my parents. Singing for them would create a special and fun moment that we can share together.

제안: Answer clearly and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and give specific examples. Explain how singing helps people feel better during difficult times.

예시: Yes, I definitely believe that singing can bring happiness to people, especially during difficult times. For example, when I feel sad or lonely, singing helps me feel better and lifts my spirits.

× Yes, I love.

✓ Yes, I do.

The original sentence 'Yes, I love.' is incomplete and lacks an object, making it unclear. The correct response to 'Do you like singing?' should be 'Yes, I do.' to affirm the question properly.

× That's that coming to my, that's coming to my ear.

✓ That's coming to my ear.

The phrase 'That's that coming to my' is redundant and incorrect. The correct sentence is 'That's coming to my ear.' to express the idea clearly.

× And it feels so good to hear music because.

✓ And it feels so good to hear music.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'because' without completing the thought. Removing 'because' completes the sentence properly.

× Through music, I can sing and I can. I can. Forget the.

✓ Through music, I can sing and forget everything.

The original sentence is fragmented and incomplete. Completing it as 'Through music, I can sing and forget everything.' makes it coherent.

× I don't have any proper lesson in music.

✓ I don't have any proper lessons in music.

The phrase 'lesson in music' should be plural 'lessons' to indicate more than one, and 'in music' is acceptable but 'on music' can also be used. Here, plural 'lessons' is more appropriate.

× Anne. Aye. I did not learn it, but I just observe the people around.

✓ No, I did not learn it, but I just observe the people around.

'Anne. Aye.' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. Replacing it with 'No,' clarifies the sentence. Also, 'observe' should be in present tense as it is a habitual action.

× Around me whenever there is a an event and we have this karaoke in our in this.

✓ Around me whenever there is an event and we have karaoke in our place.

The phrase 'in our in this' is incorrect and redundant. Simplifying to 'in our place' or 'here' is clearer. Also, 'a an' is a typo; only 'an' is needed before a vowel sound.

× I like the thing for the person.

✓ I like to sing for the person.

The original sentence is unclear and incomplete. The question is 'Who do you want to sing for?' so the answer should be 'I like to sing for the person.' to make sense.

× That has a great impact on me.

✓ Who has a great impact on me.

Referring to a person requires 'who' instead of 'that'. So, 'Who has a great impact on me.' is correct.

× And. It will be a good. One or. It will be a fun moment for us.

✓ And it will be a good one, or it will be a fun moment for us.

The original sentence is fragmented with unnecessary periods. Combining into one sentence improves clarity.

× Yes, I definitely agree that sitting kind of bring happiness to the people.

✓ Yes, I definitely agree that singing kind of brings happiness to people.

'Sitting' is a typo for 'singing'. Also, 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. 'The people' is better as 'people' in general.

× Especially during their down moment.

✓ Especially during their down moments.

'Down moment' should be plural 'down moments' to indicate times of sadness. Also, 'their' is correct here referring to people in general.

× And I could relate to it because I sometimes feel sad and lonely but running when I sing.

✓ And I can relate to it because I sometimes feel sad and lonely but feel better when I sing.

'Could' should be 'can' to match present tense. 'Running' is incorrect here; likely meant 'relaxing' or 'feel better'. Replacing with 'feel better' clarifies meaning.