Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and fluent. Avoid repeating the word 'singing' unnecessarily and correct spelling errors like 'hapiness' to 'happiness'. Also, try to combine your ideas into one or two clear sentences.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions and brings me happiness.

제안: Your answer has some grammatical errors and is a bit unclear. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition like 'I I'. Also, clarify the phrase 'a class is from my nearby house music tuition' to make it more natural.

예시: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in school from my teacher, and I have also taken music classes near my house.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details. For example, explain who you want to sing for and why. Avoid phrases like 'I have to do thinking' which are confusing.

예시: I want to sing for my mother because she has always encouraged me. Singing is my passion, and I hope to build a career in this field.

제안: Your answer is short and has grammatical errors. Use correct verb forms like 'brings' instead of 'bring'. Also, explain your opinion with more details and linking words to make your answer more effective.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people because it helps express emotions and lifts the mood. For example, after I sing, I feel over the moon.

× Singing Yes, singing is a great way to express emotions and hapiness.

✓ Yes, singing is a great way to express emotions and happiness.

The word 'hapiness' is a spelling error; the correct spelling is 'happiness'. Also, the sentence starts awkwardly with 'Singing Yes,' which should be corrected to just 'Yes,' to maintain proper sentence structure.

× Yes, when I'm in school my teacher taught me how to sing and I I have also taken a class is from my nearby house music tuition.

✓ Yes, when I was in school, my teacher taught me how to sing and I have also taken a class from a nearby music tuition center.

The phrase 'when I'm in school' should be in past tense 'when I was in school' to match the past event. The phrase 'I I have also taken a class is from my nearby house music tuition' is grammatically incorrect and unclear; it should be corrected to 'I have also taken a class from a nearby music tuition center' for clarity and correctness.

× My mother encourage mean for singing, that's why I have to do thinking and it is my passion.

✓ My mother encourages me to sing, that's why I have to keep thinking about it and it is my passion.

The verb 'encourage' should be in third person singular form 'encourages' to agree with 'My mother'. The pronoun 'mean' is incorrect and should be 'me'. The phrase 'I have to do thinking' is awkward; 'I have to keep thinking about it' is clearer.

× That's why I have to do thinking and it is my passion.

✓ That's why I have to keep thinking about it and it is my passion.

The phrase 'have to do thinking' is not natural English; 'have to keep thinking about it' is a better expression to convey continuous thought.

× I have to build my career in this field.

✓ I want to build my career in this field.

The phrase 'I have to build my career' implies obligation, but the intended meaning is desire or intention, so 'I want to build my career' is more appropriate.

× After singing, I felt over the moon.

✓ After singing, I feel over the moon.

The question is about general opinion, so present tense 'feel' is appropriate instead of past tense 'felt'.

× That's why singing bring happiness to people.

✓ That's why singing brings happiness to people.

The subject 'singing' is singular, so the verb should be 'brings' to agree in number.