Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more fluent and coherent by avoiding sentence fragments and pauses. Use complete sentences and connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your points with specific reasons.

예시: I enjoy singing even though I'm not a professional. I often sing while doing chores or exercising because it helps me feel peaceful and keeps my mind focused.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas and by expanding your explanation with more specific details.

예시: I tried to learn singing when I was eight years old, but I couldn't continue because of limited access to lessons. However, if I have the opportunity now, I would definitely take it to improve my skills.

제안: Work on making your sentences complete and clear. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific examples to support your points.

예시: I used to sing just for myself, but after my son was born, I noticed he enjoys it when I sing. He even tries to imitate me, which makes me think he might have an interest in singing too.

제안: Focus on expressing your ideas clearly and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your thoughts and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

예시: I definitely believe singing brings happiness. For example, when I'm feeling sad, singing helps improve my mood. I also enjoy singing for my family, and they appreciate it because it brightens their day.

× Although I'm not a professional singer.

✓ Although I'm not a professional singer,

The sentence is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone. It needs to be connected to an independent clause to form a complete sentence. Adding a comma and continuing the sentence corrects the structure.

× I like to sing songs when I I'm doing some work or.

✓ I like to sing songs when I'm doing some work or

The phrase 'I I'm' is incorrect due to repetition. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'or' which suggests continuation; it should be connected properly or ended.

× When I'm working out.

✓ When I'm working out,

This is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone as a sentence. It needs to be connected to an independent clause with a comma.

× This gives me a sense of peace and.

✓ This gives me a sense of peace and

The sentence ends with 'and' which is a conjunction expecting another clause. The sentence is incomplete and should be connected to the next idea or completed.

× Will not allow my thoughts to go out of my range.

✓ It will not allow my thoughts to go out of my range.

The sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'It' clarifies the subject and completes the sentence.

× When I was 8 years old I tried to learn singing, but due to accessibility factors I couldn't continue it.

✓ When I was 8 years old, I tried to learn singing, but due to accessibility factors, I couldn't continue it.

Adding commas after introductory phrases and clauses improves clarity and readability but the tense usage is correct here.

× But today, if I get a chance to learn singing, I will definitely grab it.

✓ But today, if I get a chance to learn singing, I will definitely take it.

The phrase 'grab it' is informal and less appropriate in this context. Using 'take it' is more suitable for expressing opportunity acceptance.

× Earlier I used to sing for myself, but after giving birth to my son, he enjoys me when I sing and he.

✓ Earlier I used to sing for myself, but after giving birth to my son, he enjoys it when I sing and he

The pronoun 'me' is incorrect here; 'it' refers to the singing and is the correct object pronoun. Also, the sentence ends abruptly and needs continuation.

× Also practice singing when I sing and try to.

✓ He also practices singing when I sing and tries to

The sentence lacks a subject and verb agreement. Adding 'He' as subject and correcting verb forms to 'practices' and 'tries' fixes the sentence.

× Grab the things.

✓ grab the things

This fragment is incomplete and should be connected to the previous sentence or completed to form a full sentence.

× That I think he's inclined toward singing.

✓ that I think he's inclined toward singing.

This is a dependent clause and should be connected to the previous sentence to form a complete thought.

× I absolutely agree to this statement because I am a person who.

✓ I absolutely agree with this statement because I am a person who

The correct preposition with 'agree' is 'with' not 'to'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly and needs continuation.

× Sings when I'm sad in might move will totally change.

✓ sings when I'm sad; it might move me and totally change my mood.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Reconstructing it with proper punctuation and words clarifies the meaning.

× I enjoy singing.

✓ I enjoy singing.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× And I sing for my family as well.

✓ I sing for my family as well.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and often unnecessary. Removing 'And' improves formality and flow.

× They enjoy when I sing.

✓ They enjoy it when I sing.

The verb 'enjoy' requires an object. Adding 'it' clarifies what they enjoy.

× Different journals for them.

✓ I sing different genres for them.

The original sentence is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. Assuming 'journals' should be 'genres' and completing the sentence clarifies the meaning.