Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical errors that affect clarity. Try to use simple, clear sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions. For example, when I listen to my favorite songs, they lift my mood and make me feel happier. Additionally, singing with friends during social gatherings is a fun way to connect with others.

제안: Your answer contains unclear words and incomplete sentences. Focus on clear pronunciation and complete your thoughts. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your singing lessons.

예시: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in school, I took a music class where I received basic vocal training and learned about different singing techniques. These lessons helped me improve my skills because singing has always been my passion.

제안: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Try to answer directly with clear sentences, provide specific reasons, and use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

예시: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because they have always supported me. Singing for them makes me feel connected and appreciated. Moreover, sharing music with loved ones creates joyful and memorable moments.

제안: Your answer has some unclear words and minor grammar errors. Use clear vocabulary and complete sentences. Add linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people. It allows individuals to express their emotions and is a great way to relieve stress. For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they sing their favorite songs, whether alone or with others.

× Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helped me realize in its break my emotions.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes present tense 'enjoy' with past tense 'helped'. Since the enjoyment is current, the verb should be in present tense 'helps'. Also, 'realize in its break my emotions' is unclear and incorrect; 'express my emotions' is a clearer and grammatically correct phrase.

× For example, when a fairly tres seeing my favorite songs leave my move and make me feel happier.

✓ For example, when I hear my favorite songs, they move me and make me feel happier.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Fairly tres seeing' and 'leave my move' are incorrect phrases. The corrected sentence uses proper subject-verb agreement and clearer expression.

× Additionally, I fighted a fund way to call it with honest during social gradle drink.

✓ Additionally, I found a fun way to call it with honesty during social gatherings.

'Fighted' is an incorrect past tense form; the correct past tense of 'find' is 'found'. 'Fund' is a misspelling. 'Honest' should be 'honesty' as a noun. 'Gradle drink' is unclear; 'social gatherings' is a better phrase.

× Yes, I have learned how to see When I was in school, I took Parking a Kill where I receive basic vocal training and learn about Peach Aretha.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in school, I took a singing class where I received basic vocal training and learned about famous singers.

'See' should be 'sing'. 'Parking a Kill' is a mishearing or typo for 'singing class'. 'Receive' and 'learn' should be in past tense 'received' and 'learned' to match the past time frame. 'Peach Aretha' is likely a mishearing of 'famous singers' or 'Aretha Franklin'.

× Singing has always been a passion of mine, so those lessons really help me improve my.

✓ Singing has always been a passion of mine, so those lessons really helped me improve.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'improve my' which is incomplete. Also, since the lessons were in the past, 'help' should be 'helped' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I would like to see for my family and my close friends singing for them feel special because they are supportive an appearance by 4.

✓ I would like to sing for my family and my close friends. Singing for them makes me feel special because they are supportive.

'See for' should be 'sing for'. The sentence is fragmented and unclear; splitting into two sentences improves clarity. 'An appearance by 4' is unclear and removed for clarity.

× We booted ways people for better.

✓ We found better ways to connect with people.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Booted ways people for better' is incorrect. The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence.

× Moreover sharing music will love was created world and charged with morphea anst rested outboards.

✓ Moreover, sharing music creates love in the world and fills it with warmth and joy.

The original sentence is nonsensical and contains many errors. The correction conveys a meaningful and grammatically correct idea.

× Yes, I believe Siri can definitely bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people.

'Siri' is a mishearing or typo for 'singing'. The verb 'can' is correctly used here.

× He allows in vitals to express their emotion and can be great way to relieve strain.

✓ It allows individuals to express their emotions and can be a great way to relieve stress.

'He' is incorrect when referring to 'singing'; 'it' is appropriate. 'In vitals' is incorrect; 'individuals' is correct. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. 'Strain' is better replaced with 'stress'.

× For example, many people feel uplifted, joyful when they see your favorite song either alone or with others.

✓ For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they hear their favorite song, either alone or with others.

'See your favorite song' is incorrect; 'hear their favorite song' is correct. Added 'and' between 'uplifted' and 'joyful' for proper coordination.