Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat relevant but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as 'primis' and 'which makes it will find an inch'. Try to use clear and correct English, avoid redundancy, and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions and relax. For example, when I feel stressed, singing my favorite songs makes me feel happier and more peaceful. I enjoy singing both at home and with my friends, which makes it a fun and social activity.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'tried a lot of his music instrument' and 'I never beg'. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using correct grammar and vocabulary. Keep your answer natural and concise.

예시: I have never learned singing officially. However, I have tried singing with musical instruments and with my friends. Unfortunately, I stopped practicing after a few days. But I would like to learn singing properly in the future.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors such as 'someone is special because' and 'I want to see my man sings'. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

예시: I would like to sing for someone special. Singing a love or romantic song is a good way to express feelings to that person. For example, I want to sing a romantic song for my partner to show my love.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but contains unclear and incorrect phrases like 'Are Giulini country' and 'seemingly the creative way'. Try to use clear and correct English, provide specific examples, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people. For example, many people enjoy singing while taking a shower because it helps them relax and feel joyful. Also, singing is a creative way to express emotions and relieve stress.

× Yes, I like singing primis because it helps me express my emotions and feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, I like singing primarily because it helps me express my emotions and feel relaxed.

The word 'primis' is incorrect and seems to be a misspelling or misuse. The correct adverb is 'primarily' which properly modifies the verb 'like'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Also, you can see anywhere were whether at home or with friends, which makes it will find an inch.

✓ Also, you can sing anywhere, whether at home or with friends, which makes it enjoyable.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect words like 'see' instead of 'sing', 'were' instead of 'where', and 'makes it will find an inch' which is nonsensical. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I have never practiced oficially.

✓ I have never practiced officially.

The word 'oficially' is misspelled; the correct spelling is 'officially'. The tense is correct as present perfect to indicate experience up to now.

× But yeah, I tried a lot of his music instrument or with my friends, but after a few days I never beg.

✓ But yeah, I tried a lot of musical instruments or played with my friends, but after a few days I never began.

The phrase 'his music instrument' is incorrect; it should be 'musical instruments'. Also, 'beg' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'began' (past tense of begin). The sentence is corrected for pronoun use and verb tense.

× I stopped. I stopped practicing, but I would like to learn singing in future.

✓ I stopped. I stopped practicing, but I would like to learn singing in the future.

The phrase 'in future' is missing the definite article 'the'. The tense is appropriate, but the article usage needs correction.

× I would like to sing for someone is special because.

✓ I would like to sing for someone special because...

The phrase 'someone is special' is incorrect; it should be 'someone special'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly; it should be completed or connected properly.

× Singing a love song or romantic song can express your feelings to someone special.

✓ Singing a love song or a romantic song can express your feelings to someone special.

The sentence is mostly correct but missing the article 'a' before 'romantic song' for parallel structure.

× So I want to see my man sings a song for someone saying special as a romantic thing.

✓ So I want to see my man sing a song for someone special as a romantic gesture.

The phrase 'my man sings' should be 'my man sing' after 'want to see' (causative structure). 'Saying special' is incorrect; it should be 'someone special'. 'As a romantic thing' is vague; 'as a romantic gesture' is clearer.

× Definitely singing can bring happiness to people.

✓ Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people.

A comma after 'Definitely' improves sentence flow and clarity.

× For example are many people enjoy singing while taking a shower.

✓ For example, many people enjoy singing while taking a shower.

The phrase 'are many people enjoy' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'many people enjoy'. Also, a comma after 'For example' is needed.

× Are Giulini country because it helps them relax and feel joyful.

✓ In many countries, because it helps them relax and feel joyful.

The phrase 'Are Giulini country' is unclear and incorrect. Possibly intended 'In many countries'. The sentence is incomplete and needs restructuring.

× Also seemingly the creative way to express emotion and relieve the stress.

✓ Also, it is seemingly a creative way to express emotion and relieve stress.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'it is' corrects the sentence structure. 'The stress' should be 'stress' as a general concept.