Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and avoid contradictions. Briefly explain why chocolate makes you happy with a specific reason or example, and keep to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words if you add details (for example, because, so).

예시: Yes, I do. I love chocolate because it contains chemicals like serotonin that boost my mood, so eating a small piece cheers me up after a long day.

제안: Give a direct frequency answer then support it with a clear reason. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement and phrasing) and avoid unclear expressions like “climb myself.” Keep to two sentences and use linking words (because, so, but).

예시: I eat chocolate about twice a week because I try to avoid eating too much sugar, but I allow myself a small treat on weekends.

제안: Answer directly and briefly, then give a specific childhood detail. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., "I said before" sounds awkward). Use one linking word to explain parental restriction.

예시: Yes, I did. I loved chocolate as a child, but my mother limited how much I could have because she worried about my teeth.

제안: Provide a clearer, more accurate reason and more specific supporting detail. Correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and avoid scientific inaccuracies—use general phrases like ‘mood-lifting ingredients.’ Use linking words (for example, because, and).

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it contains mood-lifting ingredients and tastes pleasant, and in addition many countries produce high-quality chocolate that people enjoy.

제안: Good direct answer and reasons. Make sentences more concise and correct minor grammar (use plural/singular and article use). Limit to two sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is not overly sweet, and it can be used in many desserts such as cakes, candies and cheesecakes.

제안: Answer directly then give specific reasons and clearer language. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., "it made people happy" → "it makes people happy"). Replace vague phrases like “have something like warm and sweetheart” with concrete descriptions (e.g., "shows thoughtfulness").

예시: Yes, I do. Chocolate is a popular gift because it makes people happy and feels thoughtful, especially when you choose a favourite flavour for someone.

× I know that chocolate have and some enzyme that make me happy.

✓ I know that chocolate has an enzyme that makes me happy.

The subject 'chocolate' is singular, so the verb must be singular 'has' (not 'have'). Also the relative clause needs 'makes' to agree with the singular noun 'enzyme'. Use 'has' for possession and 'makes' for third-person singular present. Suggestion: Use singular verbs with singular subjects: 'chocolate has an enzyme that makes me happy.'

× I eat chocolate twice a week because if I eat it too much I will get fat but is really good taste.

✓ I eat chocolate twice a week because if I eat it too much I will get fat, but it really tastes good.

The clause 'is really good taste' is ungrammatical. Use the subject 'it' and the verb 'tastes' (present tense third-person singular) to describe flavor. Also add a comma before 'but' to join independent clauses. Suggestion: Say 'but it really tastes good.'

× I have to climb myself and stop eating.

✓ I have to make myself stop eating.

'Climb myself' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'make myself' when forcing oneself to do something. Use 'make' + object + infinitive: 'make myself stop.' Suggestion: Use 'make myself' to indicate self-control: 'I have to make myself stop eating.'

× Yes, that I said before, I really love chocolate.

✓ Yes, as I said before, I really love chocolate.

The phrase 'that I said before' is awkward and not the correct connective. Use 'as I said before' to refer to a previous statement. Tense remains present for 'love'. Suggestion: Use common linking phrase 'as I said before.'

× I love everything with chocolate, but my mom didn't allow me to eat chocolate that much.

✓ I loved everything with chocolate, but my mom didn't allow me to eat so much chocolate.

Because the question asks about being a kid ('Did you often eat... when you were a kid?'), the speaker should use past tense 'loved' to match the time frame. Also reorder 'so much chocolate' for natural English. Suggestion: Match past-tense context: 'I loved everything with chocolate... didn’t allow me to eat so much chocolate.'

× Because chocolate have an enzyme that made people happy, so it would be the reason why chocolate is popular around the world and some country have a good product about chocolate.

✓ Because chocolate has an enzyme that makes people happy, that could be a reason why chocolate is popular around the world, and some countries have good chocolate products.

Multiple errors: 'chocolate have' should be 'chocolate has' (singular). 'made people happy' should be present 'makes people happy' when stating a general fact. Beginning with 'Because' should not be followed by 'so'—use one connector; here 'that could be a reason' is better. 'Some country have' should be 'some countries have' (plural noun and verb agreement). Also 'good chocolate products' is the natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use present tense for general facts and ensure plural agreement: 'chocolate has... makes... some countries have...'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it's not too sweet and it can make a lot of types of sweet like cake, candy, bingsu, cheesecake and it's very tasty.

✓ My favorite flavor is dark chocolate because it's not too sweet and it can be used in many sweets like cake, candy, bingsu, and cheesecake, and it's very tasty.

'Make a lot of types of sweet' is ungrammatical. Use 'be used in many sweets' or 'be used to make many sweet dishes.' Also include commas in a list and use plural 'sweets'. Suggestion: Say 'it can be used in many sweets like cake, candy, bingsu, and cheesecake.'

× I think chocolate is good to use as a gift to give to others because it made people happy.

✓ I think chocolate is good to use as a gift to give to others because it makes people happy.

The clause describes a general present-tense effect, so use present simple 'makes' rather than past 'made'. Suggestion: Use present simple for general truths: 'it makes people happy.'

× I think it's have something like warm and sweetheart.

✓ I think it has something warm and sweet about it.

'It's have' is incorrect: use 'it has'. 'Warm and sweetheart' is wrong word choice; 'sweetheart' is a noun. Use adjective 'sweet'. Reorder phrase to 'has something warm and sweet about it.' Suggestion: Use 'has' and appropriate adjectives: 'something warm and sweet.'